At 06:27 PM 2/25/99 -0500, Paul Hoffman wrote:
>Hi, folks -
>
>I've put a new scene up in my ongoing work-in-progress "On an Alien Moon"
Paul,
I like the feel of what you are doing.
I have to bitch a little about the texture download times, but they sure do
make for a nice scene. Here is what worked and what didn't (for me).
The points of interest were too sparse. Don't rely so much on the vista and
give me some more exploration to do. _Make_ me visit more of the scene
before I hit the transport. Magic carrot again.
Second world with the travelers. This one peaked my interest a lot.
Particularly the travelers. There is obviously a story there. I want to
know more about it/them. You have got the 'presence' down well in all of
the worlds, I would like to see some more character development.
The third world is definately an enigma. What the hell was going on with
the navigation!? I found it interesting. It added challenge and flavor to
the world. I loved the tablet! Those popups could really be used to good
effect. (That was a Rosetta Stone for later use in the story right ;)
The HTML. Expand on this. Along with the popups I think this is a good way
to tell an interactive narrative.
Dennis
