Dear Samita. Thanks for your comments.
See my responses inline. Best regards. Yong-Geun. On Thu, Mar 23, 2017 at 7:28 AM, Samita Chakrabarti <[email protected]> wrote: > Hi Yong-Geun, > > > Here are some comments on the 6lo-applicability document. > 6lo-chairs have been asked to take a close look at the document and I have > volunteered to guide the document content along with you/co-authors and WG. > We can meet before the 6lo meeting and lay out ideas on the modification. > > General comment: > > 1) The document is growing too big and lost focus a bit : we need to make > it concise and to the point in relevance with 6lo > 2) Editorial changes are needed toward the audience who might have heard > of 6lowpan and are interested in finding out whether their > application/network is suitable for running 6lo (6lowpan stack with > modifications). > [Yong-Geun] Yes, this document is growing big because of including of heterogeneous link layer technologies and related 6lo use cases. I agree to make it more concise. At Chicago meeting, I hope to have a time to discuss how to progress. > > 3) It talks about LTE MTC and LPWAN technologies as a backhaul gateway > where 6lo-type of networks might be one link in the gateway on the LAN > side. This is a real-life application. We need to work with LPWAN chairs > and provide diagrams to interconnect both 6lo and LPWAN networks > [Yong-Geun] O.K. I will contact LPWAN chairs and try to find a cooperation with 6lo and LPWAN., > > 4) The Design section gives ideas on different design attributes which > are useful. Now that we have various scenarios with different/TBD > attributes, I am thinking that having the same attributes for all usecases > may not be required. We may pick one or two examples with complete set of > attributes. > [Yong-Geun] Yes, it is not efficient to consider same attributes to various scenarios. I will update design section during discussion with the authors. > > 5) From the examples, it is not clear where 6lo network and nodes are > running in the example. Clarification required. > [Yong-Geun] O.K. We will try to make it clear. > > > The Abstract: > Current Text: > > This document describes the applicability of IPv6 over constrained node > networks (6lo) and use cases. It describes the practical deployment > scenarios of 6lo technologies with the consideration of 6lo link layer > technologies and identifies the requirements. In addition to IEEE 802.15.4, > various link layer technologies such as ITU-T G.9959 (Z-Wave), BLE, > DECT-ULE, MS/TP, NFC, LTE MTC, PLC (IEEE 1901), and IEEE 802.15.4e(6tisch) > are widely used at constrained node networks for typical services. Based on > these link layer technologies, IPv6 over networks of resource-constrained > nodes has various and practical use cases. To efficiently implement typical > services, the applicability and consideration of several design space > dimensions are described. > > Suggested Text: > This document describes the applicability guideline of IPv6 over > constrained node networks (6lo) specifications and use cases. It describes > the practical deployment scenarios of *multiple* 6lo technologies and > identifies the requirements. *A consideration on use-case deployment > design dimensions is also described. The aim of this document is to guide > an audience who are new to IPv6 low power constrained network technologies > and want to assess if the 6lowpan stack can be applied to their constrained > L2-technology of interest*. > [Yong-Geun] Thanks for your suggest. I will reflect this change. > > > Editorial comments: > I have many editorial comments; we can discuss them at IETF 'side meeting'. > [Yong-Geun] Thanks. If I receive editorial comments, I will reflect. > Other: > Section 5 ( Design Space): Please add a sub section on '6lo adaptation > consideration'. I can help with the text there. > Primarily this subsection may talk about in general what people might > think about when they consider running IP(v6) on their constrained nodes > (i,e IPv6 address mapping, Prefix distribution, Access security, > fragmentation requirements, privacy, L2/L3 topology etc.) > [Yong-Geun] O.K. I will add a sub section and reflect your input. > > > What do folks think about a tittle " 6lo Applicability Guideline" instead > of " 6lo Applicability and Usecases" ? > [Yong-Geun] "6lo Applicability Guideline" seems not to bad. Let's hear other's opinion at Chicago meeting. > > The goal is to hand out an IETF document to the non-IETF community to > spread the word about IETF work on IPv6 IOT stack for constrained > networks. > [Yong-Geun] Yes, it is the motivation of this draft. I agree that the current texts are not enough. I should think and discuss with more people how to satisfy our purpose. > > Comments are welcome. > > Thanks, > -Samita > > On Mon, Mar 13, 2017 at 2:20 AM, <[email protected]> wrote: > >> >> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts >> directories. >> This draft is a work item of the IPv6 over Networks of >> Resource-constrained Nodes of the IETF. >> >> Title : IPv6 over Constrained Node Networks(6lo) >> Applicability & Use cases >> Authors : Yong-Geun Hong >> Carles Gomez >> Abdur Rashid Sangi >> Take Aanstoot >> Filename : draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-01.txt >> Pages : 29 >> Date : 2017-03-13 >> >> Abstract: >> This document describes the applicability of IPv6 over constrained >> node networks (6lo) and use cases. It describes the practical >> deployment scenarios of 6lo technologies with the consideration of >> 6lo link layer technologies and identifies the requirements. In >> addition to IEEE 802.15.4, various link layer technologies such as >> ITU-T G.9959 (Z-Wave), BLE, DECT-ULE, MS/TP, NFC, LTE MTC, PLC (IEEE >> 1901), and IEEE 802.15.4e(6tisch) are widely used at constrained node >> networks for typical services. Based on these link layer >> technologies, IPv6 over networks of resource-constrained nodes has >> various and practical use cases. To efficiently implement typical >> services, the applicability and consideration of several design space >> dimensions are described. >> >> >> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is: >> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases/ >> >> There's also a htmlized version available at: >> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-01 >> >> A diff from the previous version is available at: >> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-6lo-use-cases-01 >> >> >> Please note that it may take a couple of minutes from the time of >> submission >> until the htmlized version and diff are available at tools.ietf.org. >> >> Internet-Drafts are also available by anonymous FTP at: >> ftp://ftp.ietf.org/internet-drafts/ >> >> _______________________________________________ >> 6lo mailing list >> [email protected] >> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/6lo >> > >
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