Hello Ralph:

Cheers,
> >
> >
> > Abstract update:
> >
> > BEFORE
> >
> >
> > --------------
> > Abstract
> >
> >   This document describes the minimal set of rules to operate an IEEE
> >   802.15.4 Timeslotted Channel Hopping (TSCH) network.  This minimal
> >   mode of operation can be used during network bootstrap, as a fall-
> >   back mode of operation when no dynamic scheduling solution is
> >   available or functioning, or during early interoperability testing
> >   and development.
> >
> > ---------------
> > AFTER
> >
> > ---------------
> > Abstract
> >
> > This document describes a minimal mode of operation for a 6TiSCH
> > Network, to provide IPv6 connectivity over a Non-Broadcast
> > Multi-Access (NBMA) mesh that is formed of IEEE 802.15.4 Timeslotted
> Channel Hopping (TSCH) links.
> > This minimal mode uses a collection of protocols including the 6LoWPAN
> > suite and RPL to enable slotted-aloha operations over a static TSCH 
> > schedule.
> 
> I suggest finessing the "slotted-aloha" vs "CSMA" argument by s/slotted-
> aloha/shared timeslot/ or s/slotted-aloha//
> 
> Better yet, "slotted-aloha" or "CSMA" is too much detail for the Abstract.  
> How
> about something like "enable interoperation over IEEE 802.15.4 TSCH with
> minimal network configuration and infrastructure", which is what this document
> is really about?
> 

Suggestion is to use a "shared access" as opposed to " slotted-aloha operations"



> > -------------
> > -------------
> >
> > Intro update:
> >
> >
> >
> > BEFORE
> >
> >
> > --------------
> >
> > 1.  Requirements Language
> >
> >   The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT",
> >   "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and "OPTIONAL" in
> this
> >   document are to be interpreted as described in RFC 2119 [RFC2119].
> >
> > 2.  Introduction
> >
> >   The nodes in a IEEE 802.15.4 TSCH network follow a communication
> >   schedule.  The entity (centralized or decentralized) responsible for
> >   building and maintaining that schedule has precise control over the
> >   trade-off between the network's latency, bandwidth, reliability and
> >   power consumption.  During early interoperability testing and
> >   development, however, simplicity is more important than efficiency.
> >   One goal of this document is to define the simplest set of rules for
> >   building a TSCH-compliant network, at the necessary price of lesser
> >   efficiency.  Yet, this minimal mode of operation MAY also be used
> >   during network bootstrap before any schedule is installed into the
> >   network so nodes can self-organize and the management and
> >   configuration information be distributed.  In addition, the minimal
> >   configuration MAY be used as a fall-back mode of operation, ensuring
> >   connectivity of nodes in case that dynamic scheduling mechanisms fail
> >   or are not available.  The IEEE 802.15.4 specification provides a
> >   mechanism whereby the details of slotframe length, timeslot timing,
> >   and channel hopping pattern are communicated when a node time
> >   synchronizes to the network [IEEE802154].  This document describes
> >   specific settings for these parameters.
> >
> >
> > ---------------------------
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > AFTER
> >
> > --------------
> >
> >
> > 1.  Introduction
> >
> >   A 6TiSCH Network provides IPv6 connectivity over a Non-Broadcast
> >   Multi-Access (NBMA) mesh that is formed of IEEE 802.15.4
> >   Timeslotted Channel Hopping (TSCH) links.
> >
> >   The 6TiSCH [I-D.ietf-6tisch-architecture] architecture requires the
> >   use of both RPL and the 6LoWPAN adaptation layer framework
> >   ([RFC4944], [RFC6282]) as defined over IEEE 802.14.5.
> >   6LoWPAN Neighbor Discovery [RFC6775] (ND)  is also required to
> >   exchange Compression Contexts,  form IPv6 addresses and register
> >   them for the purpose of Duplicate Address Detection, Address
> >   Resolution and Neighbor Unreachability detection over one
> >   TSCH link.
> >
> >   Nodes in a IEEE 802.15.4 TSCH network follow a communication
> >   schedule.  A network using the simple mode of operation uses a
> >   static schedule.
> >
> >   This specification defines a Minimal Configuration to build a 6TiSCH
> 
> "Minimal Configuration" or "operational parameters and procedures for a
> minimal mode of operation"?

I like this

> 
> >   Network, using the Routing Protocol for LLNs (RPL) and a static TSCH
> >   Schedule.  The 802.15.4 TSCH mode, RPL [RFC6550], and its Objective
> >   Function 0 (OF0) [RFC6552], are used unmodified, but parameters and
> >   particular operations are specified  to guarantee interoperability
> >   between nodes in a 6TiSCH Network.
> 
> What about 6LoWPAN HC, 6LoWPAN-ND, etc.?

There is no proposed change from non-TSCH 802.15.4 (6LoWPAN) operation.
We can say it there if that clarifies. I'll send  a v3.

> 
> >   More advanced work is expected in the future to complement the
> >   Minimal Configuration with dynamic operations that can adapt the
> >   Schedule to the needs of the traffic in run time.
> >
> >
> > 2.  Requirements Language
> >
> >   The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT",
> >   "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and "OPTIONAL" in
> this
> >   document are to be interpreted as described in RFC 2119 [RFC2119].
> >
> > Pascal
> >
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