Thank you Éric for your review. We will be tracking it here: 
https://github.com/yaronf/I-D/issues/176

        Yaron

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    draft-ietf-acme-star-delegation-07: No Objection

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    COMMENT:
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    Thank you for the work put into this document. The usefulness of this
    specification is clear and important!

    Special thanks for the doc shepherd's write-up as it writes about the WG
    consensus/discussion.

    Please find below some blocking DISCUSS points, some non-blocking COMMENT
    points (but replies would be appreciated), and some nits.

    I hope that this helps to improve the document,

    Regards,

    -éric

    == COMMENTS ==

    -- Abstract --
    Should "delegated identifier" be more defined ? Honestly, after reading the
    abstract, I have no clue...

    -- Section 1 --
    In "This document is a companion document to [RFC8739]" is "companion" the
    right word? I am not a native English speaker but "companion" sounds like 
the
    fates of two documents are bound together, suggest to use "complements" ?

    In the abstract CDN is just a use case while, in this introduction section, 
it
    is the main goal.

    Please expand "NDC" at first use ? Perhaps moving section 1.1 earlier ?

      "We note that other ongoing efforts address the problem of certificate
       delegation for TLS connections, specifically [I-D.ietf-tls-subcerts]
       and [I-D.mglt-lurk-tls13]."
    I am trusting the responsible ADs (SEC & TSV) about having 2+ competing IETF
    standards...

    -- Section 2 --
    It is a little unclear whether there is one NDC (one per CDN) or multiple 
NDC
    (one per edge-cache). The latter could have scalability issues. Section 1.1
    seems to indicate the former but it may be ambiguous.

    -- Section 2.3.1.2 --
    As I am not an expert in CDN, I wonder whether the example entry for
    'cname-map' is correct? (I would have used "abc.ido.ndc.example." as the 
value).

    == NITS ==

    -- Abstract --
    s/This memo defines/This document defines/ AFAIK, the 'memo' wording was 
used
    back in the XXth century ;-)

    -- Section 1.1 --
    s/symmetry/similarity/ ?





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