[Apologies for the late review. I missed the allocation somehow.] I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-allbery-afs-srv-records-04 Reviewer: Elwyn Davies Review Date: 19 February 2010 IESG Telechat date: 18 Feb 2010 Summary: Ready other than as noted by IESG (I noted the various discuss points and they aren't repeated here). A couple of editorial issues are noted below. Major issues: - Minor issues: - Nits/editorial comments: Abstract/s1: Either AFS is an acronym that should be expanded or its relationship to the 'Andrew Filing System' should be explained. s4: The PTS service name specified is afs3-prserver. Since the server is know as a PTS server, it would have seemed easier to remember if it had been called 'afs3-ptserver'. It is doubtless too late to make this change. s4: The term 'Rx' needs some brief explanation for non-AFS experts. s5, para 6 (top of page 7): s/but be aware that configuration/but be aware that that configuration/ s6, next to last para: s/doex not exist/did not exist/ _______________________________________________ AFS3-standardization mailing list [email protected] http://michigan-openafs-lists.central.org/mailman/listinfo/afs3-standardization
