Hi Wangxin,

Thanks a lot for your feedback. We will consider them in the next draft 
iteration. Especially, we need to emphasize and clarify the text in the current 
version that explains the usage of "testable-cost-types" and the restriction to 
filtered Cost Map.
Best regards
Sabine

De : alto [mailto:[email protected]] De la part de wangxin
Envoyé : lundi 20 juillet 2015 10:32
À : IETF ALTO
Objet : Re: [alto] First set of comments on draft-ietf-alto-multi-cost-00.txt

Dear Sabine, Wendy, Nico,

It's a great idea that adding multi-cost, or-constraints, and 
testable-cost-types (I like this very much). And here are my some comments 
about the design (mainly focus on Section 4 and 5).

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Page 9:

"If the "testable-cost-types" parameter is present, .... Otherwise, if 
the"multi-cost-types" parameter is present, .... If neither of those parameters 
are presents, ..."

First, "neither of ... are" should be "neither of ... is".

Second, for me, it's not easy to fully understand the relation between 
constraints, testable-cost-types, and multi-cost-types. Considering the SELECT 
statement (as you take as an example) in database, constraints are always at 
WHERE statement. And WHERE statement is quite similar to your 
testable-cost-types. So I suggest that constraints are always for 
testable-cost-types. If the "testable-cost-types" parameter is not defined, 
ALTO server considers it is equal to cost-type or multi-cost-types (there is 
only one parameter from both). Then it would be quite simple that constraints 
are only for testable-cost-types (like WHERE), and cost-type and 
multi-cost-types are for the return parameter (like SELECT).

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Page 11:

"max-cost-types: If present with value N..."

Is it possible that N is less than the number in multi-cost-types? If it is 
possible, what situation makes it happen?

=========================

Page 14:

Content-Length: [TODO]

Maybe should remove TODO

=========================

Thanks,
Xin
________________________________
Date: Mon, 20 Jul 2015 13:34:37 +0800
From: [email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>
To: [email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>
Subject: Re: [alto] First set of comments on draft-ietf-alto-multi-cost-00.txt
Sabine, Wendy, Nico,

My previous comments focused more on the details. At a high level, I feel that 
the current writeup did reflect fully the principle and the cleverness in your 
design :-)

For example, for both Introduction and Overview, I would use the following 
storyline:
- Multi cost is beneficial (already exists)
- What are the design options then?
  Option 1: introduce a new media type? But one should follow a principle of 
minimizing the number of media types, avoid duplication, ...
  Option 2: Assume no media type. First show that full cost map cannot be 
extended.
  Then your key insight is that filtered cost map (whose capabilities field 
allows multiple cost types already) allows the introduction of multicost 
without the need of a new media-type, assuming conforming client behaviors.

I feel that the preceding will make the document easier to understand.

Do I understand you correctly?

I will read the detailed grammar next.

Richard

On Mon, Jul 20, 2015 at 1:10 PM, Y. Richard Yang 
<[email protected]<mailto:[email protected]>> wrote:
Dear Sabine, Wendy, Nico,

Great work in the multi-cost document! I read the first sections (before 
Section 4, which provides the formal grammar). I will dig into the formal spec 
in the next one or two days. In the mean time, please see below for initial 
(some quite minor) comments.

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page 4:
  IETF has designed a new service called ALTO that provides guidance to
   overlay applications, which have to select one or several hosts from

 [yry] Is there a need to emphasize on overlay?

  This guidance is based on parameters that affect performance and
   efficiency of the data transmission between the hosts, e.g., the
   topological distance.  The purpose of ALTO is to improve Quality of

 [yry] The location of "e.g., ..." makes it a bit hard to read. I assume that 
it is an example of guidance? If so, how about move to be after "This guidance"?

  System (AS).  Together with this Network Map, it provides the

 [yry] "this Network Map" is not defined.

   Last, it provides the Ranking of Endpoints w.r.t. their routing cost.

 [yry] The preceding is cost map centric. Since there is also the ECS, how 
about mention cost map just as an example?

   It would be ...
   emerging applications that need information on several Cost Types,
   having them gathered in one map will save time.

  [yry] Another potential aspect is consistency: since it is a single batch,
  it is less likely to be inconsistent.

page 5:
  o  {1.2.3}: References of this form are to sections in the ALTO
      protocol specification [RFC7285].

[yry] What if you want to refer to a section in this document? Maybe mention 
that if it is a section in this document, there will be no {}?

     client to include the case of a CDN client, a client of an
      application running on a virtual server, a GRID application client

[yry] GRID or Grid?

page 6:
   The multi-cost extensions defined in this document should not break
   legacy implementations (that is, clients and servers which are not
   aware of these extensions).

[yry] "should not" is not a normative term here. I wonder what a legacy
client will behave if it seems an array. One issue is that the "meta"
field will not be compatible.

page 7:
                               "num-hopcount" ],
          ...
        }

[yry] The max-cost-types is 3, and the example has two types. So it is an
example of max?

page 8:
   This document uses the technique described above to extend Endpoint

 [yry] replace "above" with Section 3.3?

   destination PIDs.  Hence a client can use an extended Filtered Cost
   Map resource to get a full Multi Cost Map.

[yry] So the implication is that multi cost maps are provided and
retrieved only by filtered cost maps? How about make it clear upfront, in intro?

page 8:
  Second, the "AND" of simple predicates is not sufficient; to be
   useful, clients must be able to express "OR" tests.  Hence we add a

[yry] To support "is not sufficient", how about refer to the previous example 
using or?

page 8:
  Thus the following request tells the server to limit its response to
   cost points with "routingcost" <= 100 AND "hopcount" <= 2, OR else
   "routingcost" <= 10 AND "hopcount" <= 6:

[yry] So it is disjunctive normal form without not? Then why not include "not", 
to be compete?

page 9:
4.  Protocol Extensions for Multi-Cost ALTO Transactions

[yry] How about adding a transition sentence to say that now it is formal
spec?



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