Dear ALTO working group,

Here is my review of draft-ietf-alto-cdni-request-routing-alto-00.  Most of
them are minor issues.
Your feedback and comments are highly appreciated.

1. IANA consideration is missing.

2. In page 3, para "The main purpose ..."

   I prefer to define uCDN by appending "(uCDN)" to "Upstream CDN" since
the uCDN (and dCDN) are used without definition in para "CDNI FCI: ...".
Also, the "upstream CDN" appears in the following content several times,
which should be unified into "uCDN".

3. In page 6, para "Originally, ..."

   In the last quote, I prefer to use "actual algorithm ..." following the
original text in [RFC6707].

4. In page 6, para "Security: ..."

   A period is missing in the end.

5. In page 8, sec "3.1.3. Data Information"

   "a JSON object defined by [RFC8008]" seems obscure.  I guess it refers
to "a Capability Advertisement Object".

6. In page 8, sec "3.1.2", "3.1.3", "3.2"

   "[RFC7285] (Section 10.3.)" should be changed into "Section 10.3 of
[RFC7285]", otherwise this link doesn't work.  "(Section 8.4.)", "(Section
8.5.)" have the same problem.

Regards,
Shenshen

On Sat, Dec 2, 2017 at 11:27 AM, Shawn Lin <[email protected]> wrote:

> Dear authors of  draft-ietf-alto-cdni-request-routing-alto-00 and ALTOers,
>
>
> Using ALTO to provide guidelines on the FCI protocol is really a good
> idea since ATLO can provide resources information of network as well as
> endpoints by an elegant way.
>
>
> 1. I found that there are *two sections (3.3.2 and 3.3.3) left blank *in
> this draft, have they be solved yet?
>
> 2. It seems that *how to use ALTO network map* is not described in this
> draft.
>
>
> I posted one example and its source for each of them, and hope we can refresh
> the current progress and try to move it forward.
>
>
> *3.3.2.  Incremental FCI Update Example*
>
> source: https://datatracker.ietf.org/meeting/99/materials/slides-
> 99-alto-cdni-footprint-and-capabilities-advertisements-using-alto/
>
>
> POST /updates/fci HTTP/1.1
>
> Host: fcialtoupdate.example.com
>
> Accept: text/event-stream,application/alto-error+json Content-Type:
> application/alto-updatestreamparams+json Content-Length: ###
>
> { "add": {
>
>     "my-fci-stream": {
>
>         "resource-id": "my-fci-map"
>
>     }
>
> }
>
>
> HTTP/1.1 200 OK
>
> Connection: keep-alive
>
> Content-Type: text/event-stream
>
> event: application/alto-updatestreamcontrol+json
>
> data: {"control-uri": "http://fcialtocu.example.com/
> updates/streams/3141592653589"}
>
>
> event: application/cdni,my-fci-stream
>
> data: { ... full cdni message ... }
>
>
> event: application/merge-patch+json,my-fci-stream
>
> data: { ... Merge patch update of cdni objects ... }
>
>
> event: application/json-patch+json,my-fci-stream
>
> data: { ... JSON patch update of cdni objects, e.g., footprints entries
> ... }
>
>
> *3.3.3.  FCI Using ALTO Network Map Example*
>
> source: https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ma-cdni-capabilities-09#
> section-5
>
>
> networkmap:
>
>     GET /networkmap HTTP/1.1
>
>     Host: http://alto.example.com/fcifootprint001
>
>     Accept: application/alto-networkmap+json,application/alto-error+json
>
>
>     HTTP/1.1 200 OK
>
>     Content-Length: 319
>
>     Content-Type: application/alto-networkmap+json
>
>
>     {
>
>       "meta" : {
>
>         "vtag": [
>
>           {"resource-id": "my-eu-netmap",
>
>            "tag": "1266506139"
>
>           }
>
>         ]
>
>       },
>
>       "network-map" : {
>
>         "south-france" : {
>
>           "ipv4" : [ "192.0.2.0/24", "198.51.100.0/25" ]
>
>         },
>
>         "germany" : {
>
>           "ipv4" : [ "192.0.3.0/24"]
>
>         }
>
>       }
>
>     }
>
>
> fcimap:
>
>       GET /fcimap HTTP/1.1
>
>       Host: alto.example.com
>
>       Accept: application/alto-fcimap+json,application/alto-error+json
>
>
>       HTTP/1.1 200 OK
>
>       Content-Length: 618
>
>       Content-Type: application/alto-fcimap+json
>
>
>       {
>
>         "meta" : {
>
>         },
>
>         "fcimap": {
>
>           "capabilities": [
>
>             { "capability-type": "FCI.DeliveryProtocol",
>
>               "capability-value": [
>
>                 "http1.1"
>
>               ]
>
>             },
>
>             { "capability-type": "FCI.DeliveryProtocol",
>
>               "capability-value": [
>
>               "values": [
>
>                 "https1.1"
>
>               ],
>
>               "footprints": [
>
>                 { "footprint-type": "altonetworkmap",
>
>                   "footprint-value": [
>
> *                    "http://alto.example.com/fcifootprint001
> <http://alto.example.com/fcifootprint001>",*
>
> *                    "germany",*
>
> *                    "south-france"*
>
>                   ]
>
>                 }
>
>               ]
>
>             }
>
>           ]
>
>         }
>
>       }
>
>
> One suggestion about the "footprint-value": although the meaning of each
> element in "footprint-value" list is described in
> draft-ma-cdni-capabilities-09, it may be better to use objects in
> "footprint-value" list in some circumstances. For example, this may be more
> human readable.
>
> "footprint-value": [
>
>   {"uri": *"http://alto.example.com/fcifootprint001
> <http://alto.example.com/fcifootprint001>*"},
>
>   {"country":"*germany*"},
>
>   {"coutry":"*south-france*"}
>
> ]
>
>
> Bests,
>
> X. Shawn Lin
>
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