Toerless and Sheng, Here are some editorial suggestions for the draft charter.
Bill Para 5. I believe that the sentence is trying to express two areas of work: generic aspects of ASA and lifecycle management. To make this clear, please add a comma after "guidelines". Para 9, bullets 1, 2, 3, and 4. "etc." is an abbreviation for "et cetera", which means "and others; and so forth; and so on". As a result, writing "and etc." would mean "and and others". Please remove the "and" in these four bullets. Bullet 1. I understand what a "virtualization environment" is. Could you explain what a "compounding environment" is? Bullet 1. Since "e.g. YANG models" is (presumably) part of the point about OAMP, I suggest the following change: "Provisioning), e.g. YANG models," -> "Provisioning) (e.g. YANG models)," (This makes the part about YANG subordinate to OAMP.) Bullet 2. "regarding to generic" -> "regarding generic" Bullet 2. "implementer" -> "implementation" Bullet 4. "Autonomic Network" -> "Autonomic Networks" (add "s") Bullet 4. "management,autonomic SLA" -> "management, autonomic SLA" (Add space after comma.) Para 10, line 1. "the the" -> "the" (Delete extra "the".) On 05/04/2019 9:27 a.m., Toerless Eckert wrote: > Dear ANIMA WG > > We are hereby starting a last call on the revisted charter for the ANIMA WG. > > Please read current proposed 2.0.6 charter and raise any remaining issues > on this thread. On 4/19/2019 we will pass the final charter to Ignas, > our AD to be approved by IESG. > > Charter is at: > > https://trac.ietf.org/trac/anima/wiki/Recharter2019 > > Thanks > Toerless & Sheng > > _______________________________________________ > Anima mailing list > [email protected] > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/anima > -- Dr. J.W. Atwood, Eng. tel: +1 (514) 848-2424 x3046 Distinguished Professor Emeritus fax: +1 (514) 848-2830 Department of Computer Science and Software Engineering Concordia University EV 3.185 email:[email protected] 1455 de Maisonneuve Blvd. West http://users.encs.concordia.ca/~bill Montreal, Quebec Canada H3G 1M8 _______________________________________________ Anima mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/anima
