+2 Bill’s suggested edits below On Thursday, July 29, 2021, Brian Jones <[email protected]> wrote:
> +1 Bill’s suggested edits below. > > > > On Jul 28, 2021, at 3:43 PM, William Herrin <[email protected]> wrote: > > > > On Tue, Jul 27, 2021 at 9:56 AM ARIN <[email protected]> wrote: > >> In Section 8.3.: > >> > >> Under “Conditions on source of the transfer,” replace “Number resources > received as the result of an 8.2 transfer are out of scope for the purposes > of this restriction” with “This restriction does not include 8.2 transfers.” > > > > Howdy, > > > > They both seem about the same to me. The replacement is less clumsy > > than the original but still clumsy. Just throwing out some > > wordsmithing here: > > > > Current; > > > > The source entity must not have received a transfer, allocation, or > > assignment of IPv4 number resources from ARIN for the 12 months prior > > to the approval of a transfer request. Number resources received as > > the result of an 8.2 transfer are out of scope for the purposes of > > this restriction. > > > > Suggested: > > > > Excluding section 8.2 transfers, the source entity must not have > > received a transfer, allocation, or assignment of IPv4 number > > resources from ARIN during the 12 months prior to the approval of a > > transfer request. > > > > That seems to me to flow better. > > > > Regards, > > Bill Herrin > > > > > > -- > > William Herrin > > [email protected] > > https://bill.herrin.us/ > > _______________________________________________ > > ARIN-PPML > > You are receiving this message because you are subscribed to > > the ARIN Public Policy Mailing List ([email protected]). > > Unsubscribe or manage your mailing list subscription at: > > https://lists.arin.net/mailman/listinfo/arin-ppml > > Please contact [email protected] if you experience any issues. > > Brian Jones > [email protected] > > > >
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