Hi,

On Fri, Nov 14, 2025 at 5:08 PM <[email protected]> wrote:
>
> Authors,
>
> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as
> necessary) the following questions, which are also in the source
> file.
>
> 1) <!-- [rfced] Document title: FYI, for ease of the reader and per our
> process, we expanded "DLEP" in the title. Please review.
>
> Original:
>  DLEP DiffServ Aware Credit Window Extension
>
> Currently:
>  Dynamic Link Exchange Protocol (DLEP) Diffserv Aware Credit Window
>  Extension
> -->

OK.

> 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the
> title) for use on <https://www.rfc-editor.org/search>. -->

I can't think of any other good keywords.

> 3) <!-- [rfced] For ease of the reader, we expanded "CLI" where first
> used, per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide" -
> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc7322>).  Please review, and
> let us know any objections.
>
> CLI: Command-Line Interface -->

Since it appears the "CLI" is used only once, I suggest deleting
"(CLI)" and just saying "Command-Line Interface".

> 4) <!-- [rfced] Section 3:  We changed "the mismatch of capabilities" to
> "any mismatch in capabilities" per
> draft-ietf-manet-dlep-ether-credit-extension.  Please let us know any
> objections.
>
> Original:
>  In either case, the mismatch of capabilities SHOULD be
>  reported to the user via normal network management mechanisms such as
>  user interface messages or error logging.
>
> Currently:
>  In either case, any mismatch in capabilities SHOULD be
>  reported to the user via normal network management mechanisms, such
>  as user interface messages or error logging. -->

OK. Consistency with ether-credit-extension is good.

> 5) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the
> online Style Guide at
> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>,
> and let us know if any changes are needed.  Updates of this nature
> typically result in more precise language, which is helpful for
> readers.
>
> Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this
> should still be reviewed as a best practice. -->

I do not think any changes are needed for this reason.

> 6) <!-- [rfced] Please let us know if any changes are needed for the
> following:
>
> a) The following term was used inconsistently in this document.
> We chose to use the latter form.  Please let us know any objections.
>
>  Sub-Data item / Sub-Data Item (as used elsewhere in this document
>   and per the other documents in this group (Cluster 541 /
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/cluster_info.php?cid=C541) of documents)

Use of the all-caps version is fine.

> b) The following term appears to be used inconsistently in this document.
> Please let us know which form is preferred. (Note that we updated "DiffServ"
> to "Diffserv" in the document already.)
>
>  DiffServ Aware Credit Window Type Value /
>    DiffServ Aware Credit Window Extension Type Value -->

Probably best to go with the more explicit version including the word
"Extension".

Thanks,
Donald
===============================
 Donald E. Eastlake 3rd   +1-508-333-2270 (cell)
 2386 Panoramic Circle, Apopka, FL 32703 USA
 [email protected]

> Thank you.
>
> Lynne Bartholomew and Rebecca VanRheenen
> RFC Production Center
>
>
>
> On Nov 14, 2025, at 2:05 PM, [email protected] wrote:
>
> *****IMPORTANT*****
>
> Updated 2025/11/14
>
> RFC Author(s):
> --------------
>
> Instructions for Completing AUTH48
>
> Your document has now entered AUTH48.  Once it has been reviewed and
> approved by you and all coauthors, it will be published as an RFC.
> If an author is no longer available, there are several remedies
> available as listed in the FAQ (https://www.rfc-editor.org/faq/).
>
> You and you coauthors are responsible for engaging other parties
> (e.g., Contributors or Working Group) as necessary before providing
> your approval.
>
> Planning your review
> ---------------------
>
> Please review the following aspects of your document:
>
> *  RFC Editor questions
>
>   Please review and resolve any questions raised by the RFC Editor
>   that have been included in the XML file as comments marked as
>   follows:
>
>   <!-- [rfced] ... -->
>
>   These questions will also be sent in a subsequent email.
>
> *  Changes submitted by coauthors
>
>   Please ensure that you review any changes submitted by your
>   coauthors.  We assume that if you do not speak up that you
>   agree to changes submitted by your coauthors.
>
> *  Content
>
>   Please review the full content of the document, as this cannot
>   change once the RFC is published.  Please pay particular attention to:
>   - IANA considerations updates (if applicable)
>   - contact information
>   - references
>
> *  Copyright notices and legends
>
>   Please review the copyright notice and legends as defined in
>   RFC 5378 and the Trust Legal Provisions
>   (TLP – https://trustee.ietf.org/license-info).
>
> *  Semantic markup
>
>   Please review the markup in the XML file to ensure that elements of
>   content are correctly tagged.  For example, ensure that <sourcecode>
>   and <artwork> are set correctly.  See details at
>   <https://authors.ietf.org/rfcxml-vocabulary>.
>
> *  Formatted output
>
>   Please review the PDF, HTML, and TXT files to ensure that the
>   formatted output, as generated from the markup in the XML file, is
>   reasonable.  Please note that the TXT will have formatting
>   limitations compared to the PDF and HTML.
>
>
> Submitting changes
> ------------------
>
> To submit changes, please reply to this email using ‘REPLY ALL’ as all
> the parties CCed on this message need to see your changes. The parties
> include:
>
>   *  your coauthors
>
>   *  [email protected] (the RPC team)
>
>   *  other document participants, depending on the stream (e.g.,
>      IETF Stream participants are your working group chairs, the
>      responsible ADs, and the document shepherd).
>
>   *  [email protected], which is a new archival mailing list
>      to preserve AUTH48 conversations; it is not an active discussion
>      list:
>
>     *  More info:
>        
> https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/ietf-announce/yb6lpIGh-4Q9l2USxIAe6P8O4Zc
>
>     *  The archive itself:
>        https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/browse/auth48archive/
>
>     *  Note: If only absolutely necessary, you may temporarily opt out
>        of the archiving of messages (e.g., to discuss a sensitive matter).
>        If needed, please add a note at the top of the message that you
>        have dropped the address. When the discussion is concluded,
>        [email protected] will be re-added to the CC list and
>        its addition will be noted at the top of the message.
>
> You may submit your changes in one of two ways:
>
> An update to the provided XML file
> — OR —
> An explicit list of changes in this format
>
> Section # (or indicate Global)
>
> OLD:
> old text
>
> NEW:
> new text
>
> You do not need to reply with both an updated XML file and an explicit
> list of changes, as either form is sufficient.
>
> We will ask a stream manager to review and approve any changes that seem
> beyond editorial in nature, e.g., addition of new text, deletion of text,
> and technical changes.  Information about stream managers can be found in
> the FAQ.  Editorial changes do not require approval from a stream manager.
>
>
> Approving for publication
> --------------------------
>
> To approve your RFC for publication, please reply to this email stating
> that you approve this RFC for publication.  Please use ‘REPLY ALL’,
> as all the parties CCed on this message need to see your approval.
>
>
> Files
> -----
>
> The files are available here:
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9894.xml
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9894.html
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9894.pdf
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9894.txt
>
> Diff file of the text:
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9894-diff.html
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9894-rfcdiff.html (side by side)
>
> Diff of the XML:
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9894-xmldiff1.html
>
>
> Tracking progress
> -----------------
>
> The details of the AUTH48 status of your document are here:
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9894
>
> Please let us know if you have any questions.
>
> Thank you for your cooperation,
>
> RFC Editor
>
> --------------------------------------
> RFC9894 (draft-ietf-manet-dlep-da-credit-extension-21)
>
> Title            : DLEP DiffServ Aware Credit Window Extension
> Author(s)        : B. Cheng, D. Wiggins, L. Berger, D. Eastlake 3rd, Ed.
> WG Chair(s)      : Don Fedyk, Ronald in 't Velt, Donald E. Eastlake 3rd
>
> Area Director(s) : Jim Guichard, Ketan Talaulikar, Gunter Van de Velde

-- 
auth48archive mailing list -- [email protected]
To unsubscribe send an email to [email protected]

Reply via email to