Title: Primer draft ready for review
I stopped before 2.6.
I hope that these comments are what you are looking for. It is a pretty well written document.  I am not a Web services user at this point but it looks to be a very good starting point for my first excursion into the world of Web Srvices.
Perhaps I will have more useful comments after I have wrestled with it when I have a practical need.



Section 2.2
"2.0document" =>"2.0 document" (missing space)
Section 2.3
"good starting point in describing the service" "=>good starting point for describing the service"
"We'll" =>We will (contractions can confuse non-native English speakers)(occurs several places)

"We'll use XML Schema" =>"We will use an XML Schema"

"(though of course each element may have any amount of substructure inside it)"=>"(although, of course, each element may have any amount of substructure inside it)"

"Thus, a message type must not directly consist of a sequence of elements or other complex type." The "or" is ambiguous or a plural is missing. Which ofthe following are you trying to say?
Thus, a message type must not directly consist of a sequence of elements or other complex types.
Thus, a message type must not directly consist of a sequence of elements or be some other complex type.

2.3.1
We've (contraction)

The ghns namespace prefix will allow us (later, when defining an interface) to reference the XML Schema target namespace that we define for our message types.
When we define an interface, the ghns namespace prefix will allow us  to reference the XML Schema target namespace that we define for our message types. (gets the interuption out of the middle of the sentence)

"Thus, the URI we specify must be" "Thus, the URI that we specify must be"
2.4.1
In following the link in the safe section  "This is further explained in 5.4 Interface Operations.",
I came to this sentence in 5.4.1
"An optional safety attribute whose value is a boolean indicating whether the operation is asserted to be "safe" (as defined in Section 3.5 of the Web Architecture [Web Architecture]) for clients to invoke. In essence, a safe operation is any operation that does not give the client any new obligations. " which leads to a list of references in 8.2 of something rather than 3.5 of anything.

There are numerous places where commas would be a helpful addition. "..., in general,..." ... and, in theory, could..."
2.5
"A binding specifies concrete message format and transmission protocol details for an interface, and must supply such details for every operation and fault in the interface." ??? Who must?

Ron

Sanjiva Weerawarana wrote:
(My apologies for using the [axis2] prefix ..)

Guys, take a look at the WSDL2.0 primer please .. comments welcome.

Sanjiva.
  



Subject:
Primer draft ready for review
From:
"Liu, Kevin" <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>
Date:
Sat, 30 Apr 2005 02:11:35 +0200
To:
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To:
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Hi all,

I have run another round of editing of the primer, mainly adding examples, diagrams, and fixing typos and broken references/placeholders in the document.

There are a few remaining to-do items (see [2]) which can be done as more info is become available. The draft at [2] should be ready for the group's review.

[1] http://dev.w3.org/cvsweb/~checkout~/2002/ws/desc/wsdl20/primer-todo.htm
[2] http://dev.w3.org/cvsweb/~checkout~/2002/ws/desc/wsdl20/wsdl20-primer.html

Best Regards,
Kevin
 

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