Barry Leiba has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-bess-evpn-na-flags-05: No Objection

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Only minor comments here; please consider them, but there’s no need for a
detailed reply.

A number of abbreviations need to be expanded on first use, including EVPN, PE,
ND, IRB, and CE.

— Abstract —
The Abstract is exactly, word for word, the same as the first two paragraphs of
the Introduction, except that the Introduction helpfully splits it into two
paragraphs.  I have comments about the text below, but for the Abstract I
suggest shortening it by removing the explanatory stuff and just leaving the
summay of what this document is doing — just the final sentence looks fine, I
think.

— Section 1 —

   An EVPN MAC/IP Advertisement route can optionally carry an IPv4 or
   IPv6 addresses associated with a MAC address.

Nit: Change “an IPv4” to just “IPv4”, I think, yes?

   the PE would not know if that
   particular IPv6->MAC pair belongs to a host, a router or a host with
   an anycast address

Two things here:  This is a case where a comma after “router” will really help
readability.  And isn’t “a host with an anycast address” also “a host”?  Can
you rephrase this to make the distinction between the first and third list
items clearer?

— Section 1.1 —
Shouldn’t “ND” also have a reference citation (RFC4861)?

— Section 2 —

   Bits 0-3 and 5 are not assigned by this document.

Shouldn’t this have the customary “MUST be set to zero, and ignored on receipt”
text?

— Section 4 —

   This will cause all the PEs in the BD
   to reply Neighbor Solicitations for the IPv6 with Neighbor
   Advertisement messages containing the wrong R and O Flags.

There’s a word missing here after “reply”: I presume the missing word is “to”.



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