ShuPing, Thank you very much for the explanation to your comments. https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage/ has changes to reflect the suggestions from you.
Can you please change the State of the RTGdir review to READY? All your comments have been addressed. -----Original Message----- From: Pengshuping (Peng Shuping) <pengshup...@huawei.com> Sent: Friday, January 27, 2023 7:49 PM To: Linda Dunbar <linda.dun...@futurewei.com>; rtg-...@ietf.org Cc: bess@ietf.org; draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage....@ietf.org Subject: RE: Rtgdir early review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-06 Hi Linda, Please find in line below. > -----Original Message----- > From: Linda Dunbar [mailto:linda.dun...@futurewei.com] > Sent: Friday, January 27, 2023 12:56 PM > To: Pengshuping (Peng Shuping) <pengshup...@huawei.com>; > rtg-...@ietf.org > Cc: bess@ietf.org; draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage....@ietf.org > Subject: RE: Rtgdir early review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-06 > > > Shuping, > > Thank you very much for the review. Sorry for the late response. > > Please see below of the changes to address your comments. > > > -----Original Message----- > From: Shuping Peng via Datatracker <nore...@ietf.org> > Sent: Tuesday, October 25, 2022 2:36 AM > To: rtg-...@ietf.org > Cc: bess@ietf.org; draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage....@ietf.org > Subject: Rtgdir early review of draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-06 > > Reviewer: Shuping Peng > Review result: Has Nits > > Hello > > I have been selected to do a routing directorate “early” review of this draft. > https://nam11.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fdata > %2F&data=05%7C01%7Clinda.dunbar%40futurewei.com%7C8daaf0e46a9e4697fe55 > 08db00d1d036%7C0fee8ff2a3b240189c753a1d5591fedc%7C1%7C0%7C638104673369 > 564690%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJWIjoiMC4wLjAwMDAiLCJQIjoiV2luMzIiLCJ > BTiI6Ik1haWwiLCJXVCI6Mn0%3D%7C3000%7C%7C%7C&sdata=Q%2FSTltuwczV3O2Wu2% > 2Bw%2Ffl21cMWmBxPaGSsOMoRNqv4%3D&reserved=0 > tracker.ietf.org%2Fdoc%2Fhtml%2Fdraft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-06&am > p;data=05%7C01%7Clinda.dunbar%40futurewei.com%7C288cea29b54f48d7 > cb5f08dab65b923e%7C0fee8ff2a3b240189c753a1d5591fedc%7C1%7C0%7C > 638022801675645042%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJWIjoiMC4wLjAw > MDAiLCJQIjoiV2luMzIiLCJBTiI6Ik1haWwiLCJXVCI6Mn0%3D%7C3000%7C%7C > %7C&sdata=kQVcmoPK9mBaEC6m6vVAv%2BFGR9NpmiOMWhccvGqPJ > bY%3D&reserved=0 > > The routing directorate will, on request from the working group chair, > perform an “early” review of a draft before it is submitted for > publication to the IESG. The early review can be performed at any time > during the draft’s lifetime as a working group document. The purpose > of the early review depends on the stage that the document has reached. > > As this document is in working group last call, my focus for the > review was to determine whether the document is ready to be published. > Please consider my comments along with the other working group last call > comments. > > For more information about the Routing Directorate, please see > https://nam11.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=http%3A%2F%2Ftrac. > t%2F&data=05%7C01%7Clinda.dunbar%40futurewei.com%7C8daaf0e46a9e4697fe5 > 508db00d1d036%7C0fee8ff2a3b240189c753a1d5591fedc%7C1%7C0%7C63810467336 > 9564690%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJWIjoiMC4wLjAwMDAiLCJQIjoiV2luMzIiLC > JBTiI6Ik1haWwiLCJXVCI6Mn0%3D%7C3000%7C%7C%7C&sdata=fc5FfMDPJNm72XPCQaT > BslRpCNs9%2F0aocKE28LbMIjw%3D&reserved=0 > ools.ietf.org%2Farea%2Frtg%2Ftrac%2Fwiki%2FRtgDir&data=05%7C01 > %7Clinda.dunbar%40futurewei.com%7C288cea29b54f48d7cb5f08dab65b92 > 3e%7C0fee8ff2a3b240189c753a1d5591fedc%7C1%7C0%7C6380228016756 > 45042%7CUnknown%7CTWFpbGZsb3d8eyJWIjoiMC4wLjAwMDAiLCJQIjoiV2l > uMzIiLCJBTiI6Ik1haWwiLCJXVCI6Mn0%3D%7C3000%7C%7C%7C&sdata > =ZGwIcNO6bxB2d97r%2F0LUB5HRku8iSb%2FU5klg8SXRK9k%3D&reser > ved=0 > > Document: draft-ietf-bess-bgp-sdwan-usage-06.txt > Reviewer: Shuping Peng > Review Date: 25-Oct-22 > Intended Status: Informational > > Summary: > > This document is basically ready for publication, but has nits that > should be considered prior to being submitted to the IESG. > > Comments: > > 3.1.3 > "The SD-WAN Traffic Segmentation is enabled on a single SD-WAN > Service to a > single > subscriber." Here the word "subscriber" is used for the first time. More > associations with the context or more explanations would be > appreciated. > [Linda] Good point. This sentence is removed as the information is > duplicated. > > 5.2 > UPDATE #1b for Route Route 12.1.1.x/24: > - MP-NLRI Path Attribute: > 12.1.1.x/24 > Nexthop: 2.2.2.2 (C-PE2) > - Encapsulation Extended Community: Type= SDWAN-Hybrid > - Color Extended Community: YELLOW > > Should the Type be "MPLS" instead of "SDWAN-Hybrid" here since it is > mentioned above that "...suppose that Route 10.1.x.x/16 can be carried > by either MPLS or IPsec and Route 12.1.1.x/24 can only be carried by MPLS..."? > > Nits: > 1. SDWAN or SD-WAN? > [Linda] SDWAN is same as SD-WAN. Added it to the definition section. > > 2. page 15, s/for the Node Loopback address:/for the Node Loopback > address. > [Linda] what do you mean? ":" -> "." > > 3. page 17, 18, s/Type, Tunneltype, Tunnel-type/TYPE? > [Linda] what do you mean? Could these various formats be simply unified as "TYPE"? Best regards, Shuping > > Thank you very much > Linda _______________________________________________ BESS mailing list BESS@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/bess
