Hi Neeraj, On Wed, Dec 6, 2023 at 2:19 AM Neeraj Malhotra (nmalhotr) < nmalh...@cisco.com> wrote:
> > > Hi Dhruv, > > > > rev20 incorporates all of the additional points below. > > > > Regarding, > > > > “* In cases where allocations are already made under FCFS, please state > that > instead of asking IANA to make the allocation again!” > > > > I am not aware of any allocations that have already been made. Have > updated the text in this section (now section 10) to call out all requested > allocations as “suggested” values. > > > > Please do let me know in case you see anything else missing. > > > Dhruv: See https://www.iana.org/assignments/bgp-extended-communities/bgp-extended-communities.xhtml#evpn 0x10 EVPN Link Bandwidth Extended Community [ draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb-15 <https://www.iana.org/go/draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb-15>] 2022-03-11 Thus, this text needs to change -- A new EVPN Link Bandwidth extended community is defined to signal local ES > link bandwidth to ingress PEs. This extended community is defined of type > 0x06 (EVPN). IANA is requested to assign a suggested sub-type value of 0x10 > for the EVPN Link bandwidth extended community, of type 0x06 (EVPN). EVPN > Link Bandwidth extended community is defined as transitive.¶ It would also be a good idea to clearly identify the registry here "EVPN Extended Community Sub-Types". Thanks! Dhruv > Thanks, > > Neeraj > > > > *From: *Dhruv Dhody <d...@dhruvdhody.com> > *Date: *Monday, December 4, 2023 at 11:36 PM > *To: *Neeraj Malhotra (nmalhotr) <nmalh...@cisco.com> > *Cc: *rtg-...@ietf.org <rtg-...@ietf.org>, bess@ietf.org <bess@ietf.org>, > draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb....@ietf.org < > draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb....@ietf.org> > *Subject: *Re: Rtgdir early review of draft-ietf-bess-evpn-unequal-lb-18 > > Thanks Neeraj! Thanks for taking my comments into consideration! > > Looking at -19 some additional points! > > - No reference should be added in the abstract > - Note to the IESG in the abstract, can be moved to the shepherd report > and provided the assigned shepherd agrees with your justification. > - s/advertisong/advertising/ > - I am worried about the use of "operators SHOULD" in Section 8 i.e. we > are using SHOULD for how operators need to behave instead of how the > implementations ought to handle these operational issues. > - This is missed: > ### Section 14 > > * In cases where allocations are already made under FCFS, please state that > instead of asking IANA to make the allocation again! > > Thanks! > Dhruv > > > > > > On Tue, Dec 5, 2023 at 8:08 AM Neeraj Malhotra (nmalhotr) < > nmalh...@cisco.com> wrote: > > > > Hi Dhruv, > > > > Many thanks for a very detailed review and comments. I have just published > version 19 that significantly revises the document to incorporate all of > your comments as well as comments from Genart early review. Please see > additional clarifications inline below. Please do let me know in case you > see anything else outstanding. > > > > Thanks, > > Neeraj > > > > > > ## Comments: > > ### General > > * Request the shepherd to make sure that there is a valid justification > for 6 > authors. Better yet just make it 5 authors (you have 3 authors from the > same > affiliation and one author marked as editor) > > [NM]: added justification for 6 authors. > > * Please follow the RFC style guide. For instance, the Introduction should > be > the first section as per - > https://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc/rfc7322.html#section-4.8.1. The best would > be to > have a new Introduction section that briefly introduces the concept and > change > section 2 to "Motivation" or something like that. > > [NM]: done > > > * Use of some words in all capital letters - OR, ALL, NOT. This should be > avoided so as not to confuse with RFC2119 keywords which have special > meaning > when in capital. > > [NM]: done > > * The documents should add references to relevant RFCs when talking about > existing EVPN features. > * IRB > * > > [NM]: done > > > ### Section 1 > > * Please update the Requirements Language template to - > ```` > The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT", > "SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "NOT RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and > "OPTIONAL" in this document are to be interpreted as described in > BCP 14 [RFC2119] [RFC8174] when, and only when, they appear in all > capitals, as shown here. > ```` > > [NM]: done > > > * Please add references for the terms where possible. Definitions such as > "Egress PE" and "Ingress PE" refer to RT-1, RT-2, and RT-5 especially needs > one. Also, can the local PE and Ingress PE be different? > > [NM]: done. Made the terminology consistent to use “Ingress/Egress PE” and > removed “Local/Remote PE” terminology. > > ### Section 4 > > * Why SHOULD and not MUST in - > ```` > Implementations SHOULD support the default units of Mbps > ```` > > [NM]: done. Corrected to MUST. > > > * IMHO section 4.2 is better suited in the appendix > > [NM]: done > > ### Section 5 > > * Section 5.1; Why SHOULD and not MUST? > > [NM]: done. Corrected to MUST. > > > * Section 5.1; Consider adding the reasoning behind > ```` > EVPN link bandwidth extended community SHOULD NOT be attached to per- > EVI RT-1 or to EVPN RT-2. > ```` > > [NM]: done > > > * Section 5.2; If the extended commuity is silently ignored, how would an > operator learn about it? At least a requirement for a log should be added. > * > > [NM]: done > > > Section 5.2; How is the weighted path list computed when the normalized > weight > is in fractions i.e. L(1, 10) = 2500 Mbps and thus W(1, 10) = 2.5? I am > guessing you assume it is an integer (same as BW Increment) but it is not > stated. > > [NM]: The method in this section is only an example. Weighted pathlist > computation is a local implementation choice. That said, divide by HCF > method in this example will always result in integer weights, although the > computed weight values using this example method may not always to be > reasonably programmed in HW. I have added another paragraph to explicitly > clarify this as well as that this is an implementation choice. > > > ### Section 6 > > * The update procedure listed here "updates" other specifications. I > wonder if > this should be captured in metadata, abstract etc. > > [NM]: Added additional text to abstract. > > * Section 6.3.1, > * Change L(min) to Lmin t to not be conffused by L(i) > > [NM]: done. > > > * I am unsure of what you mean by "with PE(1) = 10, PE(2) = 10, PE(3) > = 20" > which later changes to "with PE(1) = 10, PE(2) = 10, PE(3) = 10" * > Other > documents do not use the word affinity, it was difficult for me to > verify > the affinity formula and I left that for the WG to verify for > correctness. > > [NM]: fixed. > > > * Inconsistency between MUST and MAY - > ```` > Depending on the chosen HRW hash function, the affinity function MUST be > extended to include bandwidth increment in the computation. > > affinity function specified in [EVPN-PER-MCAST-FLOW-DF] MAY be > extended as follows to incorporate bandwidth increment j: > > affinity or random function specified in [RFC8584] MAY be extended as > follows to incorporate bandwidth increment j: > ```` > > [NM]: fixed. > > * Section 6.4, asks to add a new bullet (f) in > > https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-ietf-bess-evpn-pref-df-13.html#section-4.1 > ; Note that there is already a bullet f there! > > [NM]: This section updates bullet f in [EVPN-PREF-DF]. I have updated the > text to clearly state that. > > ### Section 9 > > * What should be the value-units in this case to be interpreted as relative > weight? > > [NM]: 0x01. Added text to state that (this is now section 7.2 in rev19). > > ### Section 12 > > * Isn't there operation issues with the correct settings of "value-units" > for > Generalized weight? How does an operator learn about the inconsistency? How > does the operator know this feature is working properly? What fields > should one > monitor? Any changes in the YANG model? > > [NM]: added. > > ### Section 13 > > * Even if your claim that there are no new security concerns could be > true, it > needs to be justified and the relevant security of base EVPN needs to be > referenced. You may also highlight some security concerns most relevant to > this > extension. > > [NM]: added. > > > ### Section 14 > > * Please don't squat on codepoint and allocate them yourself. > * Best to use TBAx > * Or at the very least say that they are suggested values > * In cases where allocations are already made under FCFS, please state that > instead of asking IANA to make the allocation again! > > [NM]: fixed. > > > ## Nits: > > * Expand the abbreviation on first use > * CE (also in abstract) > * PE (also in abstract) > * LAG (also in abstract) > * IRB > * BUM > * HRW > * DP > > [NM]: done. > > * s/detailed in RFC 7432/detailed in [RFC7432]/ > * s/all egress PEs, ALL remote traffic/all egress PEs, all remote traffic/ > * There are various instances where you use"proposed", this should be > changed > to "specified" as we are moving towards RFC publication and it is no longer > just a proposal. > > [NM]: done. > > * Isnt "per-[ES, EVI] RT-1" enough? Why does it say "per-ES > RT-1 and per-[ES, EVI] RT-1" in - ```` > In an unlikely scenario where an EVPN > implementation does not support EVPN aliasing procedures, MAC > forwarding path-list at the ingress PE is computed based on per-ES > RT-1 and RT-2 routes received from egress PEs, instead of per-ES RT-1 > and per-[ES, EVI] RT-1 from egress PEs. > ```` > > [NM]: Both per-[ES] RT-1 and per-[ES, EVI] RT-1 routes are required for > aliasing procedure specified in RFC 7432. > > > * Section 7 should ideally be a subsection of Section 6 as it is related > to the > DF election > > [NM]: done. > > > >
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