David Hobby wrote:
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Somewhere around half-way through it, I started yelling at the characters, saying something on the order of, "Take the stupid puzzle box to an CAT scanner already!"
Getting out of so many tight squeezes was another thing that bothered me.
The twist at the end obviously took a lot of work to set up, and I think a lot of that was well done. It didn't really hit me as one might wish it too, but I don't see how to rewrite it to make it work better.
I just didn't buy into the jovial, friendly Grail expert being the manipulative Teacher and that all of a sudden the previously evil Cardinal and his albino henchman were the Teacher's poor, misused victims.
-- Doug
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