On Tue, Apr 28, 2009 at 10:29 PM, John Napiorkowski <[email protected]>wrote:
> > There's a new edit of the Catalyst press release, which was graciously > donated by a copy edit expert mst found for us. mst++ > > Please take a look: > http://dev.catalystframework.org/wiki/releaseannouncements/58pressrelease.edit > > Now, there's a lot of changes and it's much shorter. Basically, the editor > felt it should be short enough to fit various syndication models, that we > should pull out all the opinion stuff and to remove links since that will > just pull traffic away. I choose to leave in links to the release homepage, > since that's at the bottom of the copy and not likely to distract from the > text, but is valuable as it brings people to a good place to start > exploring. On the release homepage I tried to reorganize some of the stuff > from the earlier PR copy. I think it will work better this way, but I > really need people to log into: > > http://dev.catalystframework.org/wiki/releaseannouncements > > and add their personal advocacy or howto stuff in the, "Blogs and third > party discussions" section, which is looking thin. > > This edit was done by an expert in these matters. I realize it says less > than many of us would prefer, given the excitement and sense of > accomplishment we feel. However, I really think this should go out ASAP > (before swine flu news drowns out anything else) and filling in the gaps is > something we should do with our blogging or through more additions to the > wiki. > > Let's get some last comments and then devise a strategy to get it > distributed as far and wide as possible. For the moment, let's try to > consider the page 'locked' keep our comments to the ML or IRC chat. I want > to set a deadline for comments of 6pm UTC (see > http://www.worldtimeserver.com/current_time_in_UTC.aspx) if you need help > figuring that out) and then started sending it around. > > The non-edit link: http://dev.catalystframework.org/wiki/releaseannouncements/58pressrelease Also, typo (should be Developers?): Developer, managers and any Perl enthusiast will love the new features, continued stability and highly adaptable framework. I think the ".." in the "It's fast and easy to get started.." should be an ellipsis or a simple period. I really like the tenor and short brevity of this revision, though. I think some of the segue ways between points can use some enhancement, but it is very good! -J
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