roger. i like that. now off to pencil drawing land... i love pencil drawing...
later :) tw On 8/10/05, Matthew Small <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > Yes, an outline is exactly what I had in mind. Just a corner of the > apartment building would bring more weight to the side and make it feel > balanced, in addition to making the whole page feel more targeted at the > apartment rental. > > Matthew Small > Web Developer > American City Business Journals > 704-973-1045 > [EMAIL PROTECTED] > > > -----Original Message----- > From: Tony Weeg [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] > Sent: Wednesday, August 10, 2005 10:10 AM > To: CF-Community > Subject: Re: interface critique > > i played with that last night... and bringing a REAL world object into > the design kinda took away from the "light airy feel" > > maybe a pencil sketch of one? > > tw > > On 8/10/05, Matthew Small <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > I'd like to see an attractive apartment building in the area to the right > of > > the tree. The building should be only partially visible. > > > > Matthew Small > > > > > > > > -----Original Message----- > > From: Tony Weeg [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] > > Sent: Wednesday, August 10, 2005 9:53 AM > > To: CF-Community > > Subject: Re: interface critique > > > > WOW! > > > > great critique. exactly what anyone who is a designer wants to hear. > > > > good intelligent critiqueing! > > > > thank you kevin. > > > > more iterations coming tonight :) ill send up another version this > evening. > > > > not that anyone will be holding their breath, but in case you can look, > > thanks! > > > > tw > > > > On 8/10/05, Kevin Graeme <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > > Well the description of "Flash site" was less to describe the tech > > > than to describe the light on useful presentation and high on abstract > > > aesthetic. It just doesn't feel like the site is trying to sell me on > > > apartments. Sorry. > > > > > > If you do keep the design concept, there are some things that could > > > use help. The size of the content block (under the tree area) doesn't > > > match the contents. Whitespace is good, but all the space under the > > > text and buttons and none on top makes them feel crammed to the > > > top.The large margin between the text and buttons makes the margins of > > > the text and left edge and buttons and right edge feel cramped. And > > > then the space between the two buttons is yet another unmatched, > > > arbitrary space. They don't all need to be pixel perfect matches, they > > > just need to complement each other and they don't right now. > > > > > > I think the rounded corner box around the descriptive text is too > > > much. It becomes effect for the veneer of design instead of something > > > that enhances the design. I think you would be better served dropping > > > the extra box around the description, filling the area with more text > > > to fill the space and give the text more leading to make it breathe. > > > If you do that, I would bring the left side in more giving it more > > > margin there instead of extending the right side to fill that gap. > > > > > > I'd also like to see a bit more distinction between the header/accent > > > text and the body text. The "Welcome to..." text doesn't pop. I really > > > like the handling of the button text though. The large text with tight > > > kerning of the name with the all lowercase, tracked out "apartments" > > > in the green is really nice. The bottom bar of contact info is pretty > > > good too. I like the "contact davis realty" being a focal point but > > > the inconsistent handling of the other text just makes me a little > > > squirmy. I think the wide tracked url and the really tight "for > > > information" provide too much contrast. And since numbers always go to > > > the cap height and most of your text is x-height, the numbers feel > > > heavier than the rest even though they look like they're technically > > > the same size. I'd also consider making the "click below for more > > > information" a light color, weight, smaller or something. It's not > > > content text but it attracts the eye too much right now, distracting > > > from the important parts. > > > > > > Those are all fine-tweaking details though. They aren't major issues, > > > just finesse. What I get hung up on is the overall floaty-ness of it. > > > The clouds are beautiful and I really like the way they blend into the > > > white background with the blue trapped in the middle creating an > > > interesting figure-ground relationship and setting the body to have a > > > margin/padding of 0 to lose the top white margin enhances that. But > > > the content bar at the bottom feels just...incomplete. It's floating > > > there in space. Here, the white background is working against the > > > design and on larger monitors that problem is more pronounced. I know > > > this is an isolated jpg though, so there may be something you intend > > > that isn't coming across here. If you ARE trying to have it actually > > > have the feel of land floating in mid-air then I would have the design > > > of the content box reflect that instead of being a simple rectangle. > > > > > > I also notice that on an 800x600 display, there is no content other > > > than the clouds, tree and a sliver of "ground". The rest is "below the > > > fold". I know there aren't many 8x6 displays out there anymore, but > > > the way the content fits makes it seem almost intentional. It's > > > actually a really neat effect if this was a portfolio site. But for > > > what appears to be a brochure site, not having the name above the fold > > > is probably not a good idea. > > > > > > Don't take these comments as a blistering critique or anything. You're > > > taking some risks with the design and that's cool to see (it's > > > certainly been a while since I've done so.) I'm just not sure the > > > approach sells apartments. I'm by no means saying you need to go back > > > to the drawing board. I think you could iterate the design a bit more > > > and see if it comes together. > > > > > > Cheers and good luck! > > > > > > -Kevin > > > > > > On 8/9/05, Tony Weeg <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > > > > interesting... and i concur. (wasnt my aim... maybe looking > > > > at all those flash 8 sites has me in a flash state of mind) > > > > > > > > is that a negative thing? i dont know? > > > > > > > > remember 99% of the clients are not tech heads so im not sure that > > > > correlation would be present? > > > > > > > > thank you :) > > > > tony > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~| Find out how CFTicket can increase your company's customer support efficiency by 100% http://www.houseoffusion.com/banners/view.cfm?bannerid=49 Message: http://www.houseoffusion.com/lists.cfm/link=i:5:168782 Archives: http://www.houseoffusion.com/cf_lists/threads.cfm/5 Subscription: http://www.houseoffusion.com/lists.cfm/link=s:5 Unsubscribe: http://www.houseoffusion.com/cf_lists/unsubscribe.cfm?user=11502.10531.5 Donations & Support: http://www.houseoffusion.com/tiny.cfm/54
