Hi Ketan,

I have addressed your review along with other IESG comments here:
https://github.com/cose-wg/draft-ietf-cose-dilithium/pull/26

Please let me know if I missed anything.

TLDR, I basically took all your suggestions, but I preserved the IANA URLs
in the body of the document.

Inline for the rest.

On Tue, Oct 7, 2025 at 4:25 AM Ketan Talaulikar via Datatracker <
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> Just some easy to address comments related to references that perhaps rise
> to the level of DISCUSS.
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> Sections 3 and 5:
>
> The URLs [IANA.jose] and [IANA.cose] are informative references?
>
> Section 8:
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> Several RFCs here that should be normative or informative references?
>

I made these informative references, and moved the requests to the IANA
considerations.


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> COMMENT:
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> Thanks to the authors and the WG for their work on this document. Please
> find
> below some comments and suggestions to improve the clarity of this
> document.
>
> General:
> s/NIST/US NIST and S/FIPS/US NIST FIPS - we want to be clear this is coming
> from an US entity
>

Done.


>
> Section 1:
>
> s/draft-ietf-cose-key-thumbprint/RFC9679
>

Done.


>
> Perhaps change "as described in [FIPS-204] with JOSE and COSE" to "as
> described
> in [FIPS-204], in conjunction with JOSE and COSE." ?
>

Excellent improvement, thank you.


>
> Perhaps "can be compared according the procedures..." should be "can be
> compared according to the procedures..." ?
>

I took your suggestion.


>
> Section 3:
>
> Keep the actions for IANA in the IANA considerations sections alone.
>
> Perhaps instead of "This document requests the registration of the
> following
> key types in [IANA.jose]:", how about "This document introduces the
> following
> key types (see section 8.1.x for details):"
>

I took your suggestion.


>
> This can be done for other similar sentences (in this section as well as
> section 5). The URLs [IANA.jose] are better placed in the respective IANA
> consideration sub-sections?
>

I kept the links here, based on feedback from Paul.


>
> s/use of multiple key type/the use of multiple key type
>

Done.


>
> s/key parameters are base64url encoded/the key parameters are base64url
> encoded
>

Done.


>
> Perhaps, instead of "Some algorithms might require or encourage additional
> structure or length checks for associated key type parameters", would this
> be
> more clear - "Some algorithms may require or recommend additional
> structure or
> length checks for associated key type parameters." ? ... not sure what is
> meant
> by encourage here?
>

 Great catch, I took your proposed text.


> Section 5:
>
> Suggest "See the ML-DSA Private Keys section of this document for more
> details." change to "See Section 4, ML-DSA Private Keys, for further
> details."
>

Done.


> Perhaps instead of "ML-DSA might not be the best choice for use cases that
> require small keys or signatures." it could be "ML-DSA may not be suitable
> for
> use cases requiring small keys or signatures." ?
>

Done.
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