Package: debian-handbook
Version: 6.0+20120509
Severity: minor
Hi Raphaël,
I've just finished reading chapter 6.
What follows is my list of corrections and proposed improvements,
grouped by relevant section.
Intro
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| a package containing the source code of a program
As usual, I would suggest a more general phrasing:
+ a package containing the source code of a program or other work
Section 6.1. Filling in the sources.list File
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| according to the licenses chosen by the authors of each program
Again, for generality's sake: s/program/work/
| but which can nevertheless be distributed freely.
I would avoid the word "freely" here, since it may be misleading
in English. Maybe the sentence could be modified as follows:
+ but which can nevertheless be distributed without fees by Debian
+ mirrors.
| is a service for users who could need those softwares
Isn't "software" uncountable in English?
I would s/softwares/packages/
Section 6.1.1.2. The Backports From backports.debian.org
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| of a recent software
Again, since "software" is uncountable, as far as I know,
I would s/a recent/some recent/
Section 6.1.2. Non-Official Resources: apt-get.org and mentors.debian.net
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| some softwares
As above, I would s/softwares/software/
Section 6.2.2. Installing and Removing
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| with a hacked system.
I don't like the use of the term "hacked" (or "hacker") with the
negative connotation that's often implied by non-specialized
journalists and non-technical people.
I think that hackers are good guys (most of them develop Free Software
and make it available for the community).
Bad guys should be called "crackers".
Hence I would s/hacked/cracked/
Section 6.2.3. System Upgrade
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| from one major Debian versionto the next,
Missing space? s/versionto/version to/
Section 6.2.6. Working with Several Distributions
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| try out a software
Once again ("software" is uncountable) I would
s/a software/software/
Section 6.4.1.3. Better Solver Algorithms
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| go the summary screen
Typo? s/go the/go to the/
Section 6.6.1. Recommended Procedure
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| or linux-image-powerpc* for PowerPC).
Extra closing parenthesis? I cannot find the corresponding opening
parenthesis, hence that closing parenthesis should probably be dropped.
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