Package: release-notes
Followup-For: Bug #782836

Here's a version with a couple of changes:

Index: en/whats-new.dbk
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--- en/whats-new.dbk    (revision 10776)
+++ en/whats-new.dbk    (working copy)
@@ -513,6 +513,23 @@
   the <systemitem role="package">php-horde</systemitem> package.
   </para>
 </section>
+<section id="debian-edu">

(I'm arranging the blends alphabetically!)

+    <title>News from Debian Edu Blend</title>
+    <para>The Debian Edu / Skolelinux project is proud to announce the first 
Beta
+    release of Debian Edu based on Debian Jessie. For the first time, Debian 
Edu is

Extra comma.

+    only made up out of packages from the main Debian archive; thus the Debian 
Edu

Comma promoted to semicolon.

+    team was able to drop their own package repository.</para>

Extra <para>s.

+    <para>Debian Edu provides an out-of-the box environment for a completely 
configured
+    school network. To ease installation and maintenance the comprehensive

Spelling (maintAIning but maintEnance).

+    <ulink url="https://wiki.debian.org/DebianEdu/Documentation/Jessie";>
+    Debian Edu Jessie manual</ulink> has been translated into seven 
languages.</para>
+    <para>An overview of educational software packages included in Debian Edu 
is
+    provided by the <ulink url="http://blends.debian.org/edu/tasks";>Debian Edu
+    task pages</ulink> - though any Debian package is just an apt-get
+    install away!</para>
+    <para>The current plan is to release Debian Edu Jessie with the first 
Debian Jessie

s/Our/The/ - since "we" here isn't "all the authors of these release
notes".

+    point release. Please consider reporting feedback to make this 
happen!</para>

"Point release", two words (though my dictionary thinks it's a kind of
avalanche.)

+</section>

-- 
JBR     with qualifications in linguistics, experience as a Debian
        sysadmin, and probably no clue about this particular package
Index: en/whats-new.dbk
===================================================================
--- en/whats-new.dbk	(revision 10776)
+++ en/whats-new.dbk	(working copy)
@@ -513,6 +513,23 @@
   the <systemitem role="package">php-horde</systemitem> package.
   </para>
 </section>
+<section id="debian-edu">
+    <title>News from Debian Edu Blend</title>
+    <para>The Debian Edu / Skolelinux project is proud to announce the first Beta
+    release of Debian Edu based on Debian Jessie. For the first time, Debian Edu is
+    only made up out of packages from the main Debian archive; thus the Debian Edu
+    team was able to drop their own package repository.</para>
+    <para>Debian Edu provides an out-of-the box environment for a completely configured
+    school network. To ease installation and maintenance the comprehensive
+    <ulink url="https://wiki.debian.org/DebianEdu/Documentation/Jessie";>
+    Debian Edu Jessie manual</ulink> has been translated into seven languages.</para>
+    <para>An overview of educational software packages included in Debian Edu is
+    provided by the <ulink url="http://blends.debian.org/edu/tasks";>Debian Edu
+    task pages</ulink> - though any Debian package is just an apt-get
+    install away!</para>
+    <para>The current plan is to release Debian Edu Jessie with the first Debian Jessie
+    point release. Please consider reporting feedback to make this happen!</para>
+</section>
 <section id="debian-games">
     <title>Debian Games Blend</title>
     <para>The Debian Games Team proudly presents the Debian Games <ulink

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