Christian Perrier <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > If you enable this option, no initial configuration or database will be > - created for you. > + created automatically. > > "unpersonnalise"
Why not drop "automatically"? It doesn't add much. [...] > + Before upgrading to a new version of the OpenLDAP server, the data of > + the LDAP directories can be dumped to plain text files > + which is a standardized description of that data (LDIF format, standing for > LDAP Data Interchange Format). Drop "the data of" - again, what does it add? "which are standardized descriptions", perhaps? > . > - Selecting "always" will make the maintainer scripts dump your > - databases before upgrading unconditionally. Selecting "when needed" > + Selecting "always" will instruct the maintainer scripts unconditionnally > dump the > + databases before upgrading. Selecting "when needed" > will only dump the database if the new version is incompatible with > - the old database format and it has to be reimported. The "never" > - choice will just go ahead without ever dumping your database. > + the old database format and it has to be reimported. Selecting "never" > + will instruct the maintainer scripts to never dump the database. > > Native speakers, I'm pretty sure I'm using incorrect English > here....but I prefer this over "make the maintainer scripts"..:-) Drop "instruct the maintainer scripts" from these perhaps? Alternative: add "to" after the "instruct the maintainer scripts". > -_Description: Directory to dump databases: > +_Description: Directory for dumped databases: > > Should be "directory to dump databases to", I think...but as this is > not very nice looking, I reformulate. Fine. > Please specify the directory where the LDAP databases will be exported. > - Within this directory several LDIF files are created which correspond > + Within this directory, several LDIF files are created which correspond s/Within/in/ s/are created/will be created/ # ? > to the search bases located on the server. Make sure you have enough > - free space on the partition the directory is located. The first > + free space on the partition the directory is located. The first on the partition +where+ the directory is located. [...] > The configuration you entered is invalid. Make sure that the DNS domain name > - has a valid syntax, the organization is not left empty and that the admin > + uses a valid syntax, the organization is not left empty and that the admin > > Better ? Probably. Is "is valid" inaccurate? [...] > Template: slapd/autoconf_modules > Type: boolean > Default: true > _Description: Change configuration to load backend modules? > - Starting with OpenLDAP 2.1 backends are not longer built into the > + Starting with OpenLDAP 2.1, backends are not longer built into the s/not longer/no longer/ > Template: slapd/upgrade_slapadd_failure [...] > + Original LDAP directory files are saved in > + /var/backups. The results of the attempted upgrade is the LDIF file s/The results/The result/ > + in /var/backups. The failure may be due to a configuration problem > + (in which case slapcat would have failed too) or due a problem in the s/due a/due to a/ > + LDIF file. In such case, you should fix it and run slapadd > + again. > + > [...] > Template: slapd/backend [...] > + It is recommended to use the BDB backend. Why not be direct: "The BDB backend is recommended."? > --- ../openldap2.3.old/debian/control 2007-09-23 07:19:49.238094433 +0200 > +++ debian/control 2007-10-01 07:56:41.858459494 +0200 > @@ -18,10 +18,11 @@ > Conflicts: umich-ldapd, ldap-server, libltdl3 (= 1.5.4-1) > Replaces: libldap2, ldap-utils (<< 2.2.23-3) > Provides: ldap-server > -Description: OpenLDAP server (slapd) > - This is the OpenLDAP (Lightweight Directory Access Protocol) standalone > - server (slapd). The server can be used to provide a standalone directory > - service and also includes the slurpd replication server. > +Description: OpenLDAP server - slapd daemon Doesn't the d of slapd stand for daemon? If so, this is effectively putting "slap daemon daemon"... I'd leave it as just "slapd". Hope that helps, -- MJ Ray http://mjr.towers.org.uk/email.html tel:+44-844-4437-237 - Webmaster-developer, statistician, sysadmin, online shop builder, consumer and workers co-operative member http://www.ttllp.co.uk/ - Writing on koha, debian, sat TV, Kewstoke http://mjr.towers.org.uk/
