On Wed, 2008-06-25 at 01:11 -0600, dann frazier wrote: > On Tue, Jun 24, 2008 at 04:01:02PM +0200, Franklin PIAT wrote: > > On Tue, 2008-06-24 at 05:25 -0600, dann frazier wrote: > > > The etchnhalf team and the Frans Pop (on behalf of the d-i team) have > > > drafted release notes for the etchnhalf portion of the upcoming 4.0r4 > > > release. We would appreciate any feedback you may have. > > > > > > http://people.debian.org/~dannf/tmp/etchnhalf/ > > > > * In the first paragraph, the reference to "2.6.24 etch-and-a-half > > kernel..." seems a bit to come from nowhere. Is it supposed to > > be introduced in another page ? > > This is introduced in the first paragraph "This includes packages > based upon the Linux 2.6.24 kernel...", and then referred to in the > 3rd. Do you have an alternate way of wording it that you believe would > be more clear?
I made two attempts. The problem is that I change the semantic from "etch-and-a-half is 4.0r4" to "etch-and-a-half is a set of packages [to improve hardware support]". Even though it match my understanding, it doesn't fits in the rest of the page (which should be then worded as install "Debian Etch 4.0r4 with etch-and-a-half")... If we consider that etch-and-a-half = 4.0r4(+) as a whole, then we should stick to your wording : Etch-and-a-half is the name of the release, no need to explain it. Franklin ** Attempt 1 ** current : Additional packages have been added in the Debian 4.0r4 point release to increase the set of hardware supported by Debian 4.0 proposed : An additional set of packages, known as etch-and-a-half, have been added in the Debian 4.0r4 point release to increase the set of hardware supported by Debian 4.0 ** Attempt 2 ** current : This includes packages based upon the Linux 2.6.24 kernel and additional drivers for the X window system. proposed : Those packages, collectively named "etch-and-a-half", includes Linux 2.6.24 kernels, modules for it and additional drivers for the X window system. -- To UNSUBSCRIBE, email to [EMAIL PROTECTED] with a subject of "unsubscribe". Trouble? Contact [EMAIL PROTECTED]
