Osamu Aoki wrote: > I attach proposed change as files: > index.wml > ddp.wml > obsolete.wml > > If no one object, I will commit them to english/doc directory.
It does have one or two non-native-speakerisms, the most glaring being: > <dt><strong><a > href="http://www.gnu.org/software/texinfo/manual/texinfo/html_node/index.html";>info > files</a></strong></dt> > <dd>Many GNU software is documented through <em>info > files</em> instead of manual pages. These files include detailed > information of the program itself, options and example usage > and are available through the <tt>info</tt> > command. > </dd> Software is a non-count-noun, so you can't have many of it. Say <dd>GNU software is commonly documented through <em>info The "information of X, Y and Z" bit needs surgery, too: These files include detailed information on the program itself, along with options and example usage, > <dt><strong>various README files</strong></dt> > <dd>The <em>read me</em> files are also common — they are simple > text No, make it: <dd><em>README</em> files are also common — these are simple text (and s/read me/README/g) > <dt><strong>quick reference cards</strong></dt> > <dd> > <p>Quick reference cards are very short summaries of a certain > (sub)system. Usually, such a reference card provides the mostly s/mostly/most/ > used commands on a single piece of paper. Some notable reference > cards and collections include:</p> Here and in a few other places there are multi-weaselled lists - "some of its features, for example, include (but are not limited to) FOO, BAR, and BAZ, among many others". I don't know if that's normal in some other language, but it sounds ridiculous in English - here you'd be best of dropping the "Some". > <dl> > <dt><a href="http://tangosoft.com/refcard/";>Debian > GNU/Linux Reference Card</a></dt> > <dd>This card, that can be printed out in a single paper, s/that/which/, and s/in a single/on a single sheet of/. > provides a list of the most important commands and is > a good reference for new users of Debian that want to > familiarise with them. At least basic knowledge of computer, ...and so on, but this is getting a bit much for the morning after a Release Party... Could we organise some way of getting the webpages passed through a longer-term debian-l10n-english review? -- JBR Ankh kak! (Ancient Egyptian blessing) -- To UNSUBSCRIBE, email to [email protected] with a subject of "unsubscribe". Trouble? Contact [email protected] Archive: http://lists.debian.org/[email protected]
