Okay, after much delay (so sorry everyone!) I finally have major progress here.
Several issues came up with the script when recording the audio. The most stark was that jumping in with the budget line was totally non-sequitur, had no connection to the rest of the script. A few other words just flowed badly in terms of their sound (actual flow of phonemes), and some bits lacked clarity. The new script (which now has audio ready for storyboarding) has fewer high-level words, so it's easier to understand, everything flows well. No, it's not perfect, and there are a few variations of each line that are equally good and just have different trade-offs. But this really works finally. Here's the script: ``` 1. Things like software, music, journalism, and research *can* be public goods, freely used and shared by *everyone*. 2. But most publishers keep exclusive control so they can show ads and charge access fees. 3. And projects released under free and open terms don't get enough funding. 4. To solve this dilemma, we developed a cooperative fundraising method which we call crowd*matching*. 5. You support a project by pledging a monthly donation of 1 cent for every 10 patrons who give with you. 6. So, a thousand patrons means a thousand dollars; and 5,000 patrons at 5 dollars each would bring a project's monthly income to 25,000 dollars. 7. With this pledge, you give up some individual control in order to build consensus and grow the crowd. 8. But you still choose which projects stay active within your overall budget for the system. 9. Join Snowdrift.coop today, and help clear the path to a free and open future! ``` And here's 13 takes of audio with just some variation in delivery and vocal style: http://snowdrift.sylphs.net/d/841e82092d/ Note that I changed one word in the script after recording. The "and" in line 6 was a "but" when I recorded the audio. This shouldn't affect the storyboarding process and can be edited later or re-record the audio. Yes, there's some room to tweak things, especially the audio delivery, but I really want to go forward with using this and storyboarding and get the video done. Between here and the final video, the audio itself can be tweaked, a light ambient music background can be added, etc. Nothing is set in stone. But this script finally passes all the requirements I have, and I tried it with various people for feedback, including those not really involved. It finally works well overall for the limited time. Please, video animation folks, get to work. I won't offer suggestions. Make some good storyboards and then show the rest of us! Cheers, Aaron -- Aaron Wolf co-founder, Snowdrift.coop
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