You asked for comments so here goes (I do not know C# or .NET)

On page http://www.apache.org/~hammett/avalondotnet/index.html
- A spelling error "Architeture" is spelt "Architecture" (Missing the "c").
- grammar error "The Avalon version for .Net is not yet public available. "
- make "public" "publically" - public is a noun publically is an ad
On the page http://www.apache.org/~hammett/articles/dotnettransactions.html
- Normally an application which deals with business logic soon or later
will need transactions. I would reword this as "Sooner or later an
application that deals with business logic will need transaction support"
Note the subtle difference between the word "which" and "that" - "which"
starts a phrase and is delimited by commas - "that" does not required the
commas. Normally which is used when the thought being expressed is less
connected to the containing sentence - an ancilliary thing.
- spelling error "obvios:" "obvious"
- Thats allows you to create COM+ components - try "That allows you to"
- "If that is ok to you please stop reading this right now" - This sentence
does not flow well and I am not sure what you mean by it. The sentence
itself did not seem to relate with what followed.

On the http://www.apache.org/~hammett/articles/jta.html
"Wops" is actually spelt "Whoops". I assume that I did not this on one of
your posts. "Wops" is (amoungst other meanings) is a terminate for ethnic
eg Italian, Greek, Spanish - but I do not believe that anyone would really
think you meant this mistake.





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Gentleman,


Please refer to

http://www.apache.org/~hammett/avalondotnet/index.html

for a lot of Avalon.Net information (and english errors)


Comments are welcome!

hammett


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