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Emmanuel Lecharny resolved DIR-256.
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Resolution: Fixed
Fixed.
Thanks for the review... As a non english native speaker, I must admit I took
no offense *at all* from your comments. In fact, I really appreciated them :)
> Cosmetic - Grammar on Vision page
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> Key: DIR-256
> URL: https://issues.apache.org/jira/browse/DIR-256
> Project: Directory
> Issue Type: Task
> Components: sitedocs
> Environment: n/a -- web page issue
> Reporter: Corey Richard
> Assignee: Alex Karasulu
> Priority: Trivial
> Original Estimate: 0.5h
> Remaining Estimate: 0.5h
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> I realize that this will come off as picky, but if it was my page I would
> want to know. In hopes of helping the web pages to appear a bit more
> polished:
> On:
> http://directory.apache.org/api/vision.html
> 1)
> "An clear example is the underlying network layer : "
> The colon should not have a space before it, and the sentence should start as
> "A clear example".
> 2)
> "OpenDS will use Grizzly, when we will use MINA."
> The second part of the sentence is too clse to "when will we", and it makes
> the sentence awkward. It would probably work out better as:
> "OpenDS will use Grizzly, while we will use MINA."
> (Though, on this point I'm not entirely sure, because the first part of the
> sentence is in third person and the second part is in first. This makes it
> look like two different groups are being talked about. It's confusing
> because earlier on the page the term "OpenDS" is talked about as "we". Just
> trying to explain it is confusing.)
> Again, I don't mean to be picky simply in order to tear anything or anyone
> down; I just don't want the project to be slighted because of confusion on
> the web page.
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