On the 3rd paragraph you didn't capitalize the "S" in Squeezebox, and
you made it two seperate words when it should be one.  Also, the 3rd
paragraph feels grammatically cumbersome - you used multiple commas
when a semicolon might be more appropriate.  For instance, you said:

"Fit your Squeezebox anywhere and plug it into your stereo, its highly
polished material against a brushed metal face is a joy for the eyes,
as well as the ears."

You might also try:

"Fit your Squeezebox anywhere and plug it into your stereo; its highly
polished material against a brushed metal face is a joy for the eyes -
as well as the ears."

Anyone care to comment on that suggestion?  My English is a little
rusty...  ;-)

I also agree that the red on gray is hard on the eyes.

Again, this isn't attacking you - just meant as constructive
criticism...


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