On the 3rd paragraph you didn't capitalize the "S" in Squeezebox, and you made it two seperate words when it should be one. Also, the 3rd paragraph feels grammatically cumbersome - you used multiple commas when a semicolon might be more appropriate. For instance, you said:
"Fit your Squeezebox anywhere and plug it into your stereo, its highly polished material against a brushed metal face is a joy for the eyes, as well as the ears." You might also try: "Fit your Squeezebox anywhere and plug it into your stereo; its highly polished material against a brushed metal face is a joy for the eyes - as well as the ears." Anyone care to comment on that suggestion? My English is a little rusty... ;-) I also agree that the red on gray is hard on the eyes. Again, this isn't attacking you - just meant as constructive criticism... -- EnochLight ------------------------------------------------------------------------ EnochLight's Profile: http://forums.slimdevices.com/member.php?userid=3392 View this thread: http://forums.slimdevices.com/showthread.php?t=21215 _______________________________________________ Discuss mailing list [email protected] http://lists.slimdevices.com/lists/listinfo/discuss
