-----BEGIN PGP SIGNED MESSAGE----- Hash: SHA1 On 05/16/2012 11:58 PM, Hugo Roy wrote: > Le mercredi 16 mai 2012 à 16:45 +0200, Erik Albers a écrit : >> The text is available here: http://policy.etherpad.fsfe.org/7; >> PW: SWPAT2012 >> > > Ciaran and I have given 2 proposals for the introduction and I > also brought various substantial changes to the document with > comments that need your attention. I did some changes again, thanks for your good work! Please have a look at the actual version. I created a third option for the introduction. The text reads like:
"Software patents, thus, are a real threat to users freedom, innovation and the whole Free Software community." This is a simple sentence, addressing the most important topics and therefore (hopefully) attracts readers. There is no need to come up with detailed arguments or information in the introduction. The introduction should be a short, attractive message to get readers to go on reading. Now it reads like: "FSFE is working toward a world where software does what users want it to do. Software patents, however, create legal and financial risks that block most people from being able to safely participate in software development and distribution. Software patents, thus, are a real threat to users freedom, innovation and the whole Free Software community." Then, in the following passages we come up with detailed information and arguments. Hence, there is no need wo include them in the introduction. What do you think? Cheers, Erik - -- Erik Albers [ ] Free Software Foundation Europe [ ][ ][ ] Policy Team [ ] Your donation powers our work! [http://fsfe.org/donate/] Contact me in < Deutsch/English/Español > via: Mail [email protected] Jabber [email protected] Phone +49-30-27595290 Free Software Foundation Europe e.V. is a German Verein registered at the Registergericht Hamburg (VR 17030). -----BEGIN PGP SIGNATURE----- Version: GnuPG v1.4.10 (GNU/Linux) Comment: Using GnuPG with Mozilla - http://enigmail.mozdev.org/ iQIcBAEBAgAGBQJPtkR8AAoJEBho/C6GOdyB7HQP/1+YJJ7dRRpP9KhiJH7riDrq ScLotJF0y1zZDRjMFan1JJcnn8ubvTn6m7VEN2DK5IrKApxwBdzn5FVwkKdyEENP WMCs1uvW6pAqiZXUiOR2MtrpHGHvcd6dQC1fDkazZNgQiUlHivFNaqpLVHsxe1KX ocEc/QUjR+HZE5bIWlKYEzcHqzb+tIYyuVTFE4NnNlFJ/L/etVAY+mYc31qf0pl+ Rwx9rg1YnsvVPl0evJpMitreYJtPGgAaVzzWWLrgGa0PcQatbSug7W5TasCI+peH 5uJpQJDSmq5GvasAsul0/ZqreKOnipuy1cmXprne0DNuX6tl/MWtUa0HOmPWa6Cm p4jeE+7MWufOBSVoJuryVi3VjCKTedC6Nqp+ss3l5WtxDevGh7+cUgkhGp6C2RFs 5yNc1XLs/QUvKPmVnMf4p4OguIIZH7+Z0ECequENWB/yEng3r/z/vN7rzK8bgoZI fmGkuEs0syqGE7b89trP6TquTG+yvDOLDNWwraFbbfSwpGJOqRW2rIrlr02Kxb5Q Czi5tjfs/94T+NYd4pcvMZY4O9ai0kaSHhWiE2hX0QD7SE+TdidUvXmy1l0f9XFZ UMrLf4WIsh8zRUVednGmgQOSMPRx+pdrMu68qi1rnBWje9E3JGcVjVH+APKV/GC6 11OS0N0yPCvrLjB8ZGmS =5ZfK -----END PGP SIGNATURE----- _______________________________________________ Discussion mailing list [email protected] https://mail.fsfeurope.org/mailman/listinfo/discussion
