Murray Kucherawy has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-dprive-xfr-over-tls-11: No Objection
When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html for more information about DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-dprive-xfr-over-tls/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- With my BCP 14 language complainer hat on: Section 7: * "Implementations SHOULD use [RFC7828] [...] to manage persistent connections." -- since this is a SHOULD, can you suggest why an implementer might opt not to do this? Section 7.3.1 does a great job of handling the SHOULD it presents, for example. Sections 7.3.2 and 7.3.3: * Same issue as above with the SHOULDs here. Section 7.4: * "Therefore, it is RECOMMENDED that [...] there SHOULD be no more than [...]." -- I don't know how to reconcile this RECOMMENDED-SHOULD combination in the same sentence. I suggest that the first clause can be dropped with no loss of meaning. Everything else is nits, some of which were probably also mentioned by others: Section 1: * "authoritatives" should probably be "authoritative nameservers" * "authenticated denial of existences records" -- s/existences/existence/ Section 4: * "The proposed mechanisms does not attempt" -- s/does/do/, or s/mechanisms/mechanism/ Section 6: * "term is used to encompasses" -- s/encompasses/encompass/, or remove "is used to" Sections 6.1 and 6.2 * "higher than the secondaries serial" -- s/secondaries/secondary's/ Section 6.2: * "So there may be a fourth step above where [...]. There may also be a fourth step where [...]." -- so there can be two "fourth" steps? Section 6.3: * "This section attempts to presents" -- remove "attempts to", or s/presents/present/ * In the second paragraph, I think you need a comma after "servers". _______________________________________________ dns-privacy mailing list [email protected] https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/dns-privacy
