Dear all,

Thanks for your patience as I was on vacations when the publication of this I-D 
was requested. As the DNSOP responsible AD is also an author, I was selected as 
the acting responsible AD for this I-D. Hence, here are some comments that I 
want to be addressed (either by replying to me or by a revised I-D) before 
proceeding to the IETF Last Call.


  1.  The shepherd write-up is very terse , so far so good, but does not 
include a justification for the intended status (PS is the correct one of 
course) or whether cited authors agree to be authors
  2.  The id-nits tool indicates several issues to be fixed, notably fixing the 
the update meta-data tag
  3.  Abstract, is there a missing “and” in ` This is done both to allow the 
list to be more easily updated, to allow the list to be more easily referenced`
  4.  Section 1.1, suggest adding a reference to the IANA *registries* and not 
*tables* in addition to citing the names of the registries
  5.  Section 1.1, to be honest, I have no clue what is meant by ` the risk of 
algorithm compromise` ...or do you mean a vulnerability discovered in a crypto 
algo ?
  6.  Section 1.1 s/ be less secure *then* originally thought/ be less secure 
*than* originally thought/ and s/ In general it/ In general*,* it/
  7.  Section 1.1 s/ which algorithms should be deploy / which algorithms 
should be deploy*ed* / ? Even if not a SHOULD, readers will welcome to read 
what are the consequences of bypassing this should or when the should can be 
bypassed.
  8.  Section 1.2, as “deprecated” is rather vague in the IETF context, suggest 
explaining what is meant by deprecated in this document
  9.  Section 1.3 I like your last paragraph ;-)
  10. Section 2, I think that the right IANA terms are registries/fields and 
not tables/columns (same comments at multiple places)
  11. Section 2, suggest using “MAY” when it is a value to clearly separate 
from the BCP14 MAY
  12. Section 2, I am completely unclear about the justification of a BCP14 MAY 
in `MAY requires a Standards Action`. I think that some justification for the 
MAY will be welcome/
  13. Section 4, where is “*” definition in table 3 ?
  14. Sections 3 and 4, suggest splitting the first paragraph in two sentences 
as the audience is different: IANA then operators.
  15. Section 5 s/ Thus the security/ Thus*,* the security/
  16. Sections 2 & 7, I find it strange to find IANA policies and values in 
section 2 and having a reference to this section 2 in the actual IANA 
considerations (section 7). This would require some heavy text change, but I 
sincerely believe that this will be clearer.
  17. Sections 7.1 and 7.2 s/ These values should be populated / These values 
must be populated / and s/ should match / must match /
  18. Section 7.2 I think it is either ` Update the registration policy for the 
[DS-IANA<http://www.iana.org/assignments/ds-rr-types>] registry to match the 
text describing update requirements above.
  19. ` (unclear what the “above” means here) or ` the registration policy for 
the [DS-IANA<http://www.iana.org/assignments/ds-rr-types>] registry should 
match the text in describing the requirements in Section 2 of this document`
  20. Section 8 s/ The content*s* of this document was heavily discussed/ The 
content of this document was heavily discussed/
  21. Section 8 s/we/the authors/ ?
  22. References RFC 9364 seems more informative than normative to me, less 
assertive though on RFC 8624 as it is borderline to be informative only


Once the above points are addressed, then I will proceed with the publication 
of this important document. I will make sure that the 3 IETF Last Calls and the 
IESG ballots indicate the right reading order among the 3 Warren & Wes I-Ds 
;-), i.e., start with this one (and not ending by this one as I did...).

Regards,

-éric

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