Hi Rafael,

Awesome feedback, thanks much, my comments inline.

Rafael Vanoni wrote:
> Hi Michele
>
> Here are my comments/suggestions:
>
> -- 
> "Learn More About OpenSolaris"
> I don't know what's the size limit for each topic, but I'd add that:
> - OpenSolaris is an open source project licensed under the CDDL
> - It's based on code from Solaris and that both community 
> distributions and the Solaris OS are evolving from the same source base
I got most of this integrated.
>
> "Who Develops OpenSolaris?"
> - I would put the first phrase a bit differently, here's my 
> suggestion: "OpenSolaris is developed by communities working under 
> different projects. Each project focuses on one or more specific areas 
> of the system, on both kernel and userland consolidations."
got it, thanks for the writing.
> I'd also suggest placing a short, random list of links to of 4/5 
> projects, so that the visitor can quickly jump to one and see what it 
> is like - and each time it's a different list.
I hesitate to do this, but if you suggest a list of projects, I'll add them.
>
> "Which Release do I Need?"
> - I'd suggest changing this topic to "Choosing a Distribution" or 
> "Which Release Fits my Needs?"
> - under SXCE, I'd mention that this is the current development version 
> of Solaris. Perhaps change "..of the entire WOS" to "the entire 
> OpenSolaris source base". Also, "additional technology not released as 
> source" might hint that the system is not open source, so I'd suggest 
> changing it so it won't give that idea.
got these, thanks.
> - under Community Distros, I think the description of NexentaOS could 
> be updated as it's now developed by a new company and with a different 
> set of distros.
If you have this new content, please send it along and I'll update.
>
> ---
> "Get the Source for OpenSolaris"
> - I'd suggest pointing the "download the sourcebase" link to 
> http://opensolaris.org/os/downloads/on/
> - under "Building the Source", I'd point the "instructions to build" 
> link to http://www.opensolaris.org/os/community/on/devref_toc/
got it.
>
> ---
> Participate in OpenSolaris
> - under "Help with Contributor Processes", I'd remove the link to the 
> Developer's Reference Guide as it is a guide to building the source 
> (mostly ON) and AFAIK doesn't refer to the contribution process itself.
oops, I think I forgot this one, thanks again for your help!

-Michelle
>
>
> It's shaping up very nicely :)
>
> thanks
> Rafael
>
>
> Michelle Olson wrote:
>> Hi all,
>>
>> Thanks again for your detailed feedback, I've updated the landing 
>> pages with a lot of additional links this weekend and tried to 
>> incorporate all of your changes. Please have a look and let me know 
>> how you think it is coming, and if the content I've added make sense. 
>> If there are errors, omissions, broken links, any help you can 
>> provide is much appreciated!
>> http://opensolaris.org/os/project/website/splash3/
>>
>> (Note: We haven't updated graphical elements on the main splash 
>> graphic, but will try to get that tomorrow to eliminate 
>> duplication--we could use some help with icons if anyone wants to 
>> create a '?' icon for the Help page, we'd welcome your eh... help :)
>>
>> Thanks,
>> Michelle
>>


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