Thank you Richard. My first feeling is that ideas are a bit mixed in your draft, I don't know if I'm the only one to feel this. This would explain that your first section is much larger than the other ones. First of all we should certainly start by defining what we want to say, I think it's mostly contained in your sections:
1. Invite children to master computers and more (drawing, music, writing, etc.) 2. Maximize ease of use and security, for children as for parents 3. Turn any computer, anywhere at anytime, into an educational box 4. Promote free software and its philosophy 5. Why teaching computers to children is so important > We need a presentation of about 30 to 40 minutes, that should > Include several short demo videos, in action, of the games. Memory > game especially. As a result we should certainly not exceed 10 pages. > ============================================= > Working title: "As easy to use as a gaming console" I like the idea but I think that computers, the main topic, is missing from the title. What about “Computers as easy as gaming consoles”? Concerning the topics you have listed, I would arrange them in the following way. Of course section titles have to be shortened, perhaps by reusing your titles why, when, where, who, etc., or derivatives like what for, for who, etc. 1. Invite children to master computers and more (drawing, music, writing, etc.) > Games for kids > from 2 to 12 years > General appeal to everyone with children up to about 10/12 years old. > Educational and fun 2. Maximize ease of use, for children as for parents > distributed as a ISO for a self-executing CDROM > no installation required > let the kids play on any computer without data concerns > a parental control system is included to prevent access to > inappropriate content on the internet 3. Turn any computer, anywhere at anytime, into an educational box > Converts any PC into a video console > take it with ou everywhere > you may loan it, give it away, copy it as many times as you wish > http://www.doudoulinux.org/ > The new, improved version 2011-02 is available! Download it now! 4. Promote free software and its philosophy > A self-executing CD-ROM, based on software libre & free. > At no cost whatsoever. > We need volunteers to help extend and maintain this project. 5. Why teaching computers to children is so important > DoudouLinux has a goal of making computers more accessible to all > children of the world, without discrimination. I think some ideas are missing too: * teaching artistic skills * teaching IT technologies (web browser, IM software, and soon a local ) _______________________________________________ Doudoulinux-dev mailing list [email protected] https://mail.gna.org/listinfo/doudoulinux-dev
