Hey Bastian! Bastian Ilso <[email protected]> wrote: ... > I have made a first draft of the manuscript for the GNOME 3.18 release > video. > https://wiki.gnome.org/ThreePointSeventeen/ReleaseVideo#Manuscript > > The manuscript is very early stage, so I would love your help with: ...
Thanks so much for working on another video! There are still some features in the process of landing: keep an eye on the release notes wiki page, if you're not already. Also, some quick comments: * "GNOME can now adjust the brightness of your screen automatically if your computer supports it" - would benefit from more specificity: "If your computer has a light sensor, GNOME can now use it to automatically adjust the brightness of your screen." * "Software now has support for updating firmware, to help you keep your devices up to date." - "help" makes it sound like this is a small convenience thing. The new feature is a bit more than that. Perhaps something like "In the past it has been difficult to keep device firmware up to date. With the new version of GNOME Software, this is a thing of the past: installing firmware updates will be as easy as pressing a button." ? * "Nibbles sports new revamped graphics for a better gaming experience." - that's not going to land until next cycle. * "GNOME Documents has an improved way of organizing your documents." - a bit generic, and makes it sounds like there is new functionality. That's not the case - we've just made the UI nicer. :) * "GNOME's development tools has also improved vastly." - you have some grammer issues there. It should be: "GNOME's development tools have vastly improved." Also, I'd be a little wary of overselling there! * "Two new widgets has also arrived in GTK+ for viewing images and videos." The video widget (gstgtk) is actually part of GStreamer, not GTK+. The image widget (GtkImageView) won't be landing until next cycle. * "Finally, Boxes has improved its interface with a new list view for heavy users of virtual machines." - "heavy" could be misinterpreted here! "users with lots of virtual machines"?! Allan _______________________________________________ engagement-list mailing list [email protected] https://mail.gnome.org/mailman/listinfo/engagement-list
