I can say it's common for all of us to refer from net for getting more
thorough idea of our subject but to google a subject isn't dat easy I know
it very well dat sometimes it becomes really tiresome .But,it is important
too.

My best wishes r wid u,

Simone.

On Tue, Aug 18, 2009 at 4:02 PM, pln471 <[email protected]> wrote:

>
> Hello hard-working and single-minded Elham Tojan Anu and other
> helpers,:)
>
> I'm afraid I am good at correcting your essays as I told you earlier.:
> (
> I read it twice and I found it flawless...
> Thank God that Tojan is good at it!
>
> Keep in mind again as how to succeed in the writing test:
> I found my Pass Cambridge Bec Higher Teacher's book(by Summertown
> Publishing)
> You'll find the Assessment Sheet as below for BEC Higher!:)
> Maybe it will be of some help to you,as well!
>
> Your responses might include grammatical accuracy,good range of
> vacabulary,
> organisation,use of appropriate language and spelling.
>
> Use sequencers to organise your ideas clearly,
> demonstrate a range of vocabulary by not repeating a word when an
> alternative is available.
>
> For your self-evaluation:
> 1 Do you show a clear understanding of the task?
> 2 Is there an appropriate introduction and conclusion?
> 3 Are your ideas well-organised and logically ordered?
> 4 Is appropriate signposting and linking language used?
> 5 Do you develop ideas rather than repeat them?
> 6 Are the ideas clearly expressed and easy to understand?
> 7 Do you speak in a clear and natural manner?
> 8 Is the essay of an appropriate length?
>
> There's another person you can turn to:Eduardo Rocha Rodrigue!
> He's an old active member from Brazil but busy researching and
> finishing his PH.D.in Illinois,UIUC at present.He had to pass the Exam
> to do his research,so he should have a fresh memory as how to get a
> highest grade possible...;) (he's a perfectionist like you and pablo!
> LOL)
>
> His e-mail:[email protected] <e-mail%[email protected]>
> Good luck on your essays!
> Best,
> Pln
> On Aug 17, 8:20 pm, Elham Moazzen <[email protected]> wrote:
> > Thank you dear Simone;
> >
> > I have corrected the previous essay taking into account some internet
> > vegetarian sources ;) Here it is:
> >
> > Today, vegetarian diet has gained extreme popularity all over the globe.
> > Many people have substituted their meat-based diet with its meat-free
> > counterparts containing nuts, beans, seeds, fruit and vegetables. For
> sure,
> > there are certain reasons why they follow a vegetarian diet.
> >
> > First and foremost, vegetarian dishes are healthier than meat-based ones.
> > this is mainly due to their less fat and calories which reduce the
> > likelihood of suffering from heart disease. Moreover, their high fibre
> > content facilitates the digestion process. As a result, it minimizes
> bowel
> > problems. Furthermore, animal-human disease mainly transmits through
> > different kinds of meat so vegetarians are less likely to get
> > infected.Secondly, vegetarian diet is helpful for helthy weight loss. Its
> > low amount of fat prevents obesity which meat eaters generally suffer to
> a
> > great extent. A further advatnage is that a vegetarian diet is cheaper
> than
> > eating meat. Finally, some people believe that it is wrong to kill
> animals
> > either in terms of their religious beliefs or their own personal
> philosoghy.
> >
> > Nevertheless, it is clear that there are some disadvantages.
> > vegetarians lack a lot of the vitamis and minerals that are present in
> meat,
> > such as vitamin B12 or iron, or calcium if dairy products are not
> included
> > in the diet. There is also the social problem of not being able to have
> food
> > available at parties and restaurants.
> >
> >  Overall, I personally believe that human's body requires all substances
> > included in vegetables and various meat.
> > Therefore, it is not reasonable to absolutely omit any of them. Instead,
> one
> > should strike a balance between vegetarian
> > and meat-based diets in order live healthier.
> >
> > On Mon, Aug 17, 2009 at 2:58 PM, Elham Moazzen <[email protected]
> >wrote:
> >
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > > Dear all,
> > > I will at least send an essay a day to the group, for 1 month in order
> to
> > > improve my writing skills for IELTS academin module.
> > > I will be grateful if you extend my vocabulary by your proposed
> > > ideas and point my mistakes out.
> >
> > > *Many people have changed from a mainly meat-based diet to a vegetarian
> > > one in recent years. *
> > > *What are the reasons for this and to what extent do you consider it a
> > > sensible option?*
> >
> > > In recent years, people have increasingly prefered to consume more
> > > vegetables in their daily meals. Nearly,
> > > meat-based diets have replaced to a great extent with vegetarian ones
> in
> > > many areas of the world. there are
> > > many reasons why people follow a vegetarian diet.
> >
> > > Firstly, some people are againts killing animals. This is either due to
> > > their religious obligations which prohibit
> > > them from harming other living creatures or their personal philosophy
> so as
> > > to preserve different animal species
> > > and cease them to suffer. Secondly, according to scientific findings,
> > > vegetables are much healthier than meat,
> > > especially the red meat, in terms of the fibre and low fat they
> constitue
> > > which prevents various bowel problems
> > > and heart diseases. Moreover, gaining a balanced weight is evidently a
> > > direct result of consuming more vegetables
> > > compared to obesity and overweight problems caused by meat products.
> > > Eventually, foods consisting of just vegetables
> > > are less expensive thus they are more affordable as daily dishes.
> >
> > > Despite, a totally vegetarian diet has some disadvantages. Vegetables
> lack
> > > some vitamins and minerals which are
> > > necessary for brain and body development and resistance to various
> > > diseases. For instance, the calcium provided by
> > > diary products plays an essential role in bone strength and growth. On
> the
> > > other hand, people who only follow a pure
> > > vegetarian diet has difficulties in parties and restaurants which
> usually
> > > serve mixed dishes.
> >
> > > Overall, I personally believe that human's body requires all substances
> > > included in vegetables and different types of meat.
> > > Therefore, it is not reasonable to absolutely omit any of them.
> Instead,
> > > one should strike a balance between vegetables
> > > and meat taking into account the consumption of more vegetables.
> >
> > > --
> >
> > > "When you know what you want,and you want it badly enough,you'll find a
> way
> > > to get it."
> >
> > > "Successful leaders have the courage to take action while others
> hesitate."
> >
> > --
> >
> > "When you know what you want,and you want it badly enough,you'll find a
> way
> > to get it."
> >
> > "Successful leaders have the courage to take action while others
> hesitate."- Hide quoted text -
> >
> > - Show quoted text -
> >
>


-- 
Simone

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