> I have a few comments as well about the begining. First I really do enjoy
> it as its truely valueble information that we didnt get earlier. However
> given the fact that they explicitly mention how long the disguise lasted
> last time having no mention of time between scenes is too jarring. They
> seem to be on the same day from what you have said earlier. You really
> might consider swapping the scene order or if you enjoy leaving them as they
> are making some reference to it being evening or otherwise late in the day
> to have given the disguise a chance to wear off. Perhaps with the front
> desk person making a very deliberate check of the time, needing to ask a
> question of someone else before sending her on up.
Hmm... well, her meeting with Yoshinari was early in the morning, and
her meeting with Kurenai was late-ish in the afternoon, so its quite
possible that it actually did have enough time to wear off in the in
between them. I might have to make the timeframes more explicit..
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