Ooh! Feedback! Thanks! How did I miss that? Probably by not checking my email regularly enough. :P This prompts me to post Part III (yes, it's done). I'll do that shortly.
> -----Original Message----- > From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] > Sent: Wed, 16 Jan 2008 10:16:14 -0600 > To: [email protected] > Subject: [FFML] [C&C] [Ranma] Life is Complicated, Part II > >> (Hakama: often defined as a "gentleman's divided skirt," the legs >> of hakama steadily widen as they go down, leaving them very loose around >> the ankle -- think "samurai pants.") > > This aside was jarringly out of place and not especially necessary. If > you > feel the need to explain a term, do it in the footnotes at the end of the > chapter. > Yes, I worried about that. Despite my inevitable uses of expression like "Chikusho!" I am attempting to write my story to be a little more reader-friendly to the layperson than the average anime fanfic-reader would deem necessary (I'm fairly certain that one of my prereaders woud have absolutely no idea what hakama were had I not explained it). I'll consider bumping the note to the end. Hmm, or better yet, I'll put a note about it at the beginning of Part II. Thankfully, I don't think I've written any more asides like this. Feel free to call me out if you find any in later installments though. >> "Well, looks like you know how to land after a fall. Ucchan, is >> it?" >> "That's UKYOU-SAN to you, jackass!" > > "Kuonji-san", I should think. Even "Ukyou-san" would be too informal, > especially given her general dislike of this man and the entire > situation. > Excellent point; the sort of comment that makes me go, "Oh, duh -- why didn't I realize that myself?" Well, I'd better fix these things before I forget, or get distracted by shiny objects or something. ____________________________________________________________ FREE 3D EARTH SCREENSAVER - Watch the Earth right on your desktop! Check it out at http://www.inbox.com/earth --- .-------Anime/Manga Fanfiction Mailing List--------. | Administrators - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | | Unsubscribing - [EMAIL PROTECTED] | | Put 'unsubscribe' in the subject | `------------ FAQ URL coming soon.... -------------'
