Background for those who may be unaware of GenART: GenART is the Area Review Team for the General Area of the IETF. We advise the General Area Director (i.e. the IETF/IESG chair) by providing more in depth reviews than he could do himself of documents that come up for final decision in IESG telechat. I was selected as the GenART member to review this document. Below is my review, which was written specifically with an eye to the GenART process, but since I believe that it will be useful to have these comments more widely distributed, others outside the GenART group are included.
Review criteria for WG submissions: "Is this document a reasonable contribution to the area of Internet engineering which it covers? If not, what changes would make it so?" This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. This review was done as part of IETF Last Call. These comments should be treated as IETF Last Call comments. I trust that MIB Doctor review has addressed the MIB proper, hence this review focuses on the rest of the text in the draft. Nits: - Section 2, Overview: This document is provided to the IETF working group on IS-IS. It describes a management information base for the IS-IS Routing protocol as described in ISO 10589 [ISO10589], when it is used to construct routing tables for IP networks, as described in RFC 1195 [RFC1195]. Remove first sentence (will no longer be appropriate when this is published as an RFC0, and rephrase second to "This document describes ...". - Section 6, Acknowledgements: Was an extra "r" added to Chris Gunner's name? - Section 7, Security Considerations This is ok in its current form, although it would be improved with references to specific MIB tables/objects, even as examples of how uncontrolled write access could cause problems. The references are not essential, as the threat of uncontrolled write access is both obvious and compelling as described. Thanks, --David ---------------------------------------------------- David L. Black, Senior Technologist EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 [EMAIL PROTECTED] Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 ---------------------------------------------------- _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
