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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. This draft is on the right track but has open issues, described in the review. I found one open issue - Section 14's discussion of the use of SASL is incomplete, as it does not satisfy the requirements stated in Section 4 of RFC 4422. See Section 4 of RFC 4422. I also found a few minor concerns/nits: Sections 5 and 6 ought to contain ASCII diagrams of the bit fields in the Block Header and Chunk Descriptor. The discussion of chunk ordering in Section 6 on p.9 combines restrictions on which chunk types may co-exist in a single block with requirements on ordering of those types within a block. The combined discussion is somewhat confusing - it would be clearer if these two topics were separated - specify what is allowed within a single block, then specify ordering requirements for what is allowed. Section 9 should state how the client and server determine whether TLS is to be used. Since well-known ports are registered for both XPC and XPCS, this appears to be determined by client selection of which server port to use. Thanks, --David ---------------------------------------------------- David L. Black, Senior Technologist EMC Corporation, 176 South St., Hopkinton, MA 01748 +1 (508) 293-7953 FAX: +1 (508) 293-7786 [EMAIL PROTECTED] Mobile: +1 (978) 394-7754 ---------------------------------------------------- _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
