Christian: Thanks for the detailed review.
Specific comments are inline
--On Wednesday, May 09, 2007 4:37 PM +0300 Christian Vogt
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Document: draft-ietf-inch-iodef-12.txt
Reviewer: Christian Vogt
Review Date: 9 May 2007
IESG Telechat date: 10 May 2007
Summary:
This draft is in a good condition. Especially the introduction provides
a reasonable understanding of the purpose and background of the standard
for an unexperienced reader. Few comments below, though.
Comments:
I found that it might be useful to allow a telephone number to be
accompanied by a time range during which it should be used. E.g., it
might be ok to call an office number between 8 am and 5 pm, but a
cell-phone number should be used outside this time range. Possibly, the
free-form "meaning" attribute in the Telephone class could be used for
this purpose. If so, it might be useful to state this explicitly in the
document.
The use case you are describing is exactly why [EMAIL PROTECTED] and
[EMAIL PROTECTED] attributes were originally added.
As multiple parties are thinking it, but it is not document, perhaps it
should be. I propose adding the following additional text to description
of these attributes:
"... A free-form description of the element content (e.g., hours of
coverage for a given number)."
In addition, some editorial nits:
- Section 2.4, page 8:
s/encoding of the document are/encoding of the document is/
[I'm not 100% sure if "data" goes with singular or plural in
the English language, since I'm not a native speaker. But from
the information I found, it should be singular in this context.]
- Section 2.13, page 10:
s/A telephone number/A telephone or fax number/
- Section 3.7.1, page 22:
s/Regional Latin-American/Latin-American/
- Section 7.1, page 62:
s/A example/An example/
Yes, you are correct in all counts. Thanks for proofing it.
Regards,
Roman
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