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Document: draft-ietf-tsvwg-2960bis-04.txt
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: 16 May 2007
IESG Telechat date: 17 May 2007
Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed
Standard RFC. I do have some comments, though.
Overall, a very nicely written document given the rather staid
subject matter that will appeal to the most pedantic of us
protocol folks. Here are some nits, comments, and feedback
in the order that I read the draft:
1) In the top-left boiler plate on the first page (where it
says "Network Working Group"), you may want to consider
inserting "Obsoletes: 2960 (if approved)"
2) In S1.3.1 consider:
s/against security attacks/against synchronization attacks
The term "security" is too broad, and I believe that you are
trying to prevent the likelihood of TCP SYN attacks in SCTP here.
3) While reading S1.2, it would help if some more text was
devoted to interpreting the concept of an association. In other
words, in TCP we have a connection between a pair of hosts. We
can have multiple connections between the same pair of hosts,
each connection opened by a different process on the host.
Typically, a connection opened by one process on host A to
host B is not shared by another process oh host A.
When I translate that to SCTP, does that mean that I can have
multiple associations between hosts, each association opened
up by a different process on the host? Or is the model that
I have only one association between the hosts, but each pairing
of a source process and destination process is represented as
a pair of unidirectional streams within the one association?
4) S1.5: Please consider putting this section somewhere in the
beginning. Since the sub-sections that preceeded S1.5 use
the abbreciations quite a bit, introducing the user to the
abbreviations first should help readability.
5) Nit: S3, page 16: s/Section 6.10for/Section 6.10 for
6) Nit: S3.3.2.1: the text under the figure for IPv6 address
parameter - s/128 bit/128 bits
7) S3.3.5, second paragraph: the text says that the parameter
field contains an opaque data structure understood only by
the sender. I think it will add more clarity to insert the
following text at the end of the last paragraph in the section:
OLD:
The Sender-specific Heartbeat Info field should normally include
information about the sender's current time when this HEARTBEAT
chunk is sent and the destination transport address to which this
HEARTBEAT is sent (see Section 8.3).
NEW:
The Sender-specific Heartbeat Info field should normally include
information about the sender's current time when this HEARTBEAT
chunk is sent and the destination transport address to which this
HEARTBEAT is sent (see Section 8.3). This information is simply
reflected back by the receiver in the HEARTBEAT ACK message (see
Section 3.3.6).
8) Nit: S4 -
s/description of all special cases should be found in the text/
description of all special cases are found in the text.
The phrase "should be" seems non-comittal; i.e., are all special
cases mentioned in the document or not? I presume they are.
9) S5.1.2, in the IMPLEMENTATION NOTE, it says that "when the
implementation does not control the source IP address that is
used for transmitting" - do such cases arise at all? I
thought that the IP layer, especially given rfc3484, will
always know which source IP address to put in an outgoing
IP datagram.
Could it be that you meant "when the *ULP* does not control the
source IP address that is used for transmitting"?
Also, since I bring up rfc3484, I do not know if it has any
bearing on the discussion in this section. If the author has
reached a conclusion that it does not, then that is fine with me.
10) At various places, the suggested SCTP protocol parameter
values defined in S15 are used (c.f. S5.1.{3,4} and look for
'Valid.Cookie.Life' and 'Max.Init.Retransmits'). It may be
a good idea to either provide S15 at the beginning of the
text, or to have a forward pointer to S15 on the first occurrence
of the use of a protocol parameter defined in S15. This way,
the reader is alerted where to find the default values for
these parameters.
11) Nit - S7.1, first bullet item:
s/upper layer otherwise/upper layer to do otherwise
12) S10.1, API defined in G): What happens when stream id is
not provided in a RECEIVE? Is data for *all* streams
retrieved? Or data from stream 0 only (following the sematics
for SEND, where if stream id is not specified, then stream 0
is assumed.)
I think this may have a bearing on S10.2 A). When data
arrives at a SCTP layer on a host, the SCTP informs the ULP
of the stream id that the data arrived on. I presume that the
ULP then simply uses that stream id in the RECEIVE. Yes?
13) In S11.2.2, it is stated that "A widely implemented BSD
Sockets API extension exists for applications to request IP
security services..." Can you please provide a reference?
Within the IETF archives, I was able to find two documents, one
of which is an expired I-D:
1) http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-mcdonald-simple-ipsec-api-01
2) http://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc2367
Any other reference beyond the above will be extremely helpful
for implementers.
That's it.
Thanks.
- vijay
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Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent
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