Thanks for your review! Authors, can you send me OLD/NEW style edits for these and I'll add an RFC Editor's note to do these.
Francis, what are the comments from Brian? Have they been posted somewhere? Jari Francis Dupont kirjoitti: > > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd > or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > Document: draft-ietf-dhc-dhcpv6-ero-01.txt > Reviewer: Francis Dupont > Review Date: 21 May 2007 > IETF LC End Date: 28 May 2007 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Ready > > Comments: only editorial (i.e., to be handled by the RFC editor) comments: > > - 4 page 4 last sentence: either the wording is poor or the sentence > should finish by "Relay-Reply message". > > - in 4 and 5 page 4, the abbrev "ORO" should be replaced or expanded into > "Option Request Option" (I suggest to introduce the abbrev in section > 4 to > use it in section 5). > > - I suggest to use either a dash or a space in message names. BTW RFC > 3315 > uses "Relay-forward" and "Relay-reply" (a dash and one cap). > > - IMHO (i.e., do it if you'd like or if someone else asks for it) it > should > be fine to add a detailed reference (section 20.3 of RFC 3315) in the > first > sentence of section 5. > > Regards > > [EMAIL PROTECTED] > > PS: don't forget Brian's comments. > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
