I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.
Document: draft-ietf-nemo-multihoming-issues-07.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>
Review Date: 2007-06-04
IETF LC End Date: 2007-06-05
Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC.
Comments: The document is well written and easy to understand. I just
have a few nits.
Nits:
- Section 1, second paragraph. The last sentence in this paragraph spans
across 6 lines and lacks readability. It should be improved.
- Section 1, first set of bullet points. There seems to be strange
characters at the end of a sentence, or is it an arrow?
o multiple global prefixes are available in the mobile network.-->
- Acronyms: The acronym MNP is first used in Section 1, 5th paragraph.
However, it is not expanded there, but it should. Expand the acronym AR
in Figure 1. Expadn W-PAN in Example 2 in Section 3.1.
- Double reference. In Section 4.1 there is a double cross reference to
reference [8]. I assume this is an error:
"These are also discussed in [8] and [8] by the Shim6 WG. "
^^^ ^^^
- Suggestion: add a informative reference to DHCPv6 in the last sentence
of Section 2.
- IDnits reports a number of outdated references, probably due to new
updates while this document was frozen and progressing in the process.
It also reports some Down references, but they are not applicable,
because idnits considers the intended status is "Proposed Standard"
rather than Informational.
/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia tel:+358-50-4804586
Nokia Siemens Networks Helsinki, Finland
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