I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-dkim-ssp-requirements-04.txt Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani Review Date: 6 Jul 2007 IESG Telechat date: 6 Jul 2007 Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational. The introduction does a good job of introducing the problem for which the requirements are being sought. Having said that, a few nits follow primarily to improve readability of the draft. 1) S1, consider rewriting as follows to impart more clarity: OLD: This ambiguity can be used to mount a bid down attack which is inherent with systems that allow optional authentication like email NEW: This ambiguity can be used to mount a bid-down attack that is inherent with systems like email, which allow optional authentication 2) S3, consider rewriting as follows to impart more clarity: OLD: This section tries to outline some usage scenarios that it is expected that DKIM signing/verifying will take place in, and how a new protocol might be helpful to clarify the relevance of DKIM signed mail. NEW: This section outlines expected usage scenarios where DKIM signaling/verifying will take place, and how a new protocol might help to clarify the relevance of DKIM-signed mail. 3) S3.1, second paragraph: consider rewriting as follows to impart more clarity: OLD: Thus the receiver is at a disadvantage in that it does not know if it should ... NEW: Thus, the receiver is at a disadvantage in not knowing whether it should ... 4) S3.2, list item 3: The first sentence consists of two fragments joined by a "but". It would be more appropriate to join them by the phrase ", and furthermore". The second fragment does not contradict the first, thus the "but" appears anomalous. 5) S5.1, list item 4: Missing closing ']' in "Refs:..." 6) S5.2, list item 3: s/ala/a la/ Thanks, - vijay -- Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent 2701 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9F-546, Lisle, Illinois 60532 (USA) Email: [EMAIL PROTECTED],bell-labs.com,acm.org} WWW: http://www.alcatel-lucent.com/bell-labs _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
