I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-saintandre-rfc4622bis-01 Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani Review Date: 21 Aug 2007 IESG Telechat date: 1 Sept 2007 Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard. This is a short draft that defines the use of IRIs and URIs in XMPP communications. A few nits follow: 1) In a few places, [IRI], [IDNA] et al. are used as a reference holder as well as a subject, example in S2.2: "...to convert [IRI] syntax into [IDNA] syntax ..." You may want to reconsider rewriting these as follows: "... to convert IRI syntax [IRI] into IDNA syntax [IDNA]..." for better readability. 2) S2.5: s/examples include but are not/examples include, but are not/ 3) In S2.7.2 and S2.8.2, XMPP addresses continue to the next line. Do you need LWS at the beginning of the second line to denote continuation? 4) S3.8, consider s/XXXX/this document Thanks, - vijay -- Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent 2701 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9F-546, Lisle, Illinois 60532 (USA) Email: [EMAIL PROTECTED],bell-labs.com,acm.org} WWW: http://www.alcatel-lucent.com/bell-labs _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
