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Please resolve these comments along with any other comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-geopriv-policy-12.txt Summary: This draft is essentially ready for publication. Comments/Questions: ================== The last sentence in the introduction (last sentence on page 5): where do the authors anticipate actions will be defined? Same question also would apply to section 5. _______________________________________________________________________ In the next-to-last paragraph in section 4.1 (on page 10), there is an interesting (and interestingly confusing) discussion of a possibility of supporting co-planar (but not necessarily constant altitude) and/or nearly co-planar location polygons - which is then (apparently) negated in the last sentence. Is it the intention - behind saying "two polygon forms are permitted" - to assert that all other polygon forms are "not permitted" (i.e. - disallowed/forbidden)? If that is the case, this paragraph could probably be simplified. I would suggest something like: In order for the notion of a location that is defined as within a specific polygon to make sense, points specified for the polygon MUST be coplanar. To avoid implementation complexity, only two polygon forms are permitted: polygons specified using EPSG 4326, and polygons specified using EPSG 4979 with a constant altitude value. It is then possible to consider whether or not it makes sense to retain: However, implementations SHOULD be prepared to accept small variations that might occur depending on whether the the polygon is specified on a plane in space, or only relative to the ellipsoid. NITs: ==== Towards the bottom of page 4, "evalation" should be "evaluation"..._________________________________________________________ ______________ In section 12 (Security Considerations), there is what appears to be an extra closing paren at the end of the next-to-last sentence. _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
