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Document: draft-ietf-crisp-iris-dchk-07.txt
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 12 October 2007
IESG Telechat date: 18 October 2007
Summary: The two major points from the gen-art last call review have been
cleared up in this version. One minor issue remains and the editorial comments
from the previous review have not been addressed.
Comments:
s3.1.1.1, <description> bullet: I think the 'must' should be a 'MUST'.
Editorial:
Title: The acronym 'dchk' appears as DCHK later.. choose one for consistency.
Abstract:Expand IRIS acronym (OK, I know it is in the title, but...).
s1: Expand DREG acronym.
s1. para 2:s/status of domain/status of domain names/
s1, last para: s/effecient/efficient/
s3: Probably good to use the expanded from of DCHK in the section title.
s3.1.1: Caption of <domain> example display: it looks as if XML escapes
didn't get substituted.
s3.1.1, several bullets: 'period at' doesn't make sense. I think you
mean 'duration of grace period at' in each case.
s5.4: s/registeried/registered/
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