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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
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Document: draft-adolf-dvb-urn-00.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>
Review Date: 2007-10-09
IETF LC End Date: 2007-10-31
Summary: The document is almost ready for publication as an
Informational RFC. There are a few nits that could be polished.
Comments:
- I am surprised that the document includes only one reference (to RFC
2141). In particular, I am missing a reference to RFC 3406 (URN
namespace definition mechanism). Perhaps the Introduction section should
add a sentence indicating that the document follows the registration
process specified RFC 3046. At least the document correctly follows the
registration procedure of RFC 3406.
- Section 2, "Declaration of structure" indicates that the URN will
contain US-ASCII characters. Is this correct? I think it would be better
to refer directly to the syntax in RFC 2141 without having the US-ASCII
characters as a "strange intermediary".
So, I would like the authors to consider to replace the current text:
URNs assigned by DVB will have the following hierarchical
structure based on the organizational structure of the DVB
standards:
urn:dvb:{assigned US-ASCII string}
where "{assigned US-ASCII string}" is a US-ASCII string that
conforms to URN Syntax requirements ([RFC2141]).
with this other text:
URNs assigned by DVB will have the following hierarchical
structure based on the organizational structure of the DVB
standards:
urn:dvb:{NSS}
where the syntax of "{NSS}" is specified in Section 2.2 of the URN
Syntax requirements ([RFC2141]).
- Section 7, IANA considerations section, could be a bit more clear if
it said:
This document defines a URN NID registration of "dvb". IANA is
request to include it in the URN Namespaces registry.
- Section 8.1, the existing reference to RFC 2141 fails to mention "RFC
2141".
So, replace:
[RFC2141] Moats, R., "URN Syntax", May 1997.
with:
[RFC2141] Moats, R., "URN Syntax", RFC 2141, May 1997.
- On the front page, the author affiliation looks a bit strange, and it
is different from that in the last page. Also, the number of authors in
the first and last page differ.
/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia tel:+358-50-4804586
Nokia Siemens Networks Espoo, Finland
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