Miguel, Thanks for your review! I placed the acronym and e-mail address issues in the tracker as RFC Editor notes, and plan to leave the abstract issue to AUTH48 or the next draft update if there is one.
Jari Miguel Garcia kirjoitti: > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) > reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-mipshop-handover-key-03.txt > Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> > Review Date: 2007-11-06 > IETF LC End Date: 2007-11-14 > IESG Telechat: 2007-11-15 > > Summary: The document is ready for publication as a proposed standard. > > Comments: I just have a few nits. So, feel free to discard them if > you feel it. > > - I think the Abstract is way too long, and goes way beyond the 5-10 > lines that the RFC Editor recommends (see Section 4.5 in > ftp://ftp.rfc-editor.org/in-notes/rfc-editor/instructions2authors.txt ) > > So, I think you can leave the first two sentences of the abstract and > move the rest to the Introduction section. > > - Try to expand acronyms at the firs occurrence. For example, CGA is > not written immediately after "Cryptographically Generated Address". > Other terms, such as "MAC" are never expanded. > > - The second author's affiliation is incorrect, so is his e-mail address. > > That's all. Cheers, > > Miguel _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list [email protected] https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
