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Document: draft-ietf-btns-core-05.txt
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: 2 Jan 2008
IESG Telechat date: 9 Jan 2008
Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard.
A couple of nits below.
- S1, fifth paragraph:
s/and [RFC4301]'s concepts./and concepts discussed in [RFC4301]./
- In S3, nodes A, B, and SG-A are bracketed ([A], [SG-A], etc.)
This makes them look like references, especially in case of [SG-A].
A minor comment would be to not adorn the node names with square
brackets, of if you really wanted to do so, use normal brackets (i.e.,
(SG-A)) or curly braces (i.e., {SG-A}).
Thanks,
- vijay
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Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent
2701 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9F-546, Lisle, Illinois 60532 (USA)
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