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Document: draft-ietf-hokey-reauth-ps-07.txt
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <[EMAIL PROTECTED]>
Review Date: 2008-02-06
IETF LC End Date: 2008-02-07
Summary: The document is ready for publication as informational RFC.
Comments: The document is well and clearly written. I have one comment
biased by a personal opinion and a couple of nits. Treat this comments
at your discretion and with the guidance of your AD.
- My understanding is that RFC 2119 applies to standards track RFC. At
least, this is the spirit when I read the document. Therefore, I don't
find reasonable to use capital MUST, SHOULD, and MAY in a document that
is trying to express requirements. Simply: RFC 2119 does not make much
sense with requirement descriptions, in my opinion.
In particular, the draft systematically capitalizes all the MUSTs,
SHOULDs, and MAYs without considering if they make sense or not.
Consider Sections 4 (Design Goals) and Section 5 (Security Goals). I
think most of the capitalized words are not applicable. So, I would
suggest that you do an iteration on the draft considering which text
should be expressed with capital words, in the spirit of RFC 2119.
Nits:
- Section 1, second paragraph:
In many common deployment scenario, an EAP peer and EAP server
s/scenario/scenarios
- Section 1, third paragraph:
According to [RFC3748], after successful authentication, the server
to transports the MSK to the authenticator.
Remove the word: "to"
- Section 4, last paragraph. You should add some references to CAPWAP
and 802.11r, if they are available.
- Section 6.3:
The IETF CAPWAP Working Group [RFC3990] is developing a protocol
I doubt RFC 3990 is a suitable reference for a working group. Perhaps
the text can be rephrased as:
The IETF CAPWAP Working Group is developing a protocol whose problem
statement is specified in RFC 3990 [RFC3990].
/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia tel:+358-50-4804586
Nokia Siemens Networks Espoo, Finland
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